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Angel's Wings Inside

because shes my angel
wrapped in wings
and tears streaming down
how will she survive these sufferings
her eyes long gone
but always tear stains
and her hair fallen all away
her wings are bare
and her feet scorched
she never stopped being scared
bravery lived long years ago
but her warmth is gone
she is too
but no one had a clue
because life's a struggle
through and through
Every corner crossed
her heart turned cold and blue
and scars stitched closed
when she never learned to sew
She shivers now
in damp corners
and cold stone
She lives in me
With eyes wide gone
and tear stained flesh
She screams at her chest
"God, I'm sorry,
I can't surpass this test"
Tiptoed to the ledge
Looked over the edge
And leapt for her life
the destination in her mind
and left the anguish behind

And when she spread her wings to fly
she flew so far and fell so fast
Her charred wings alone, awry


Free at last

Author notes

I guess this is like a rough draft.
more or less, just a thought that sounded way better in my mind then written down anywhere.


Inspired by Billy Talent's \
Written July 23rd, 2006

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  • Teddibly Abnormal
    November 25, 2006

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    gawd that was good~

    And leapt for her life
    the destination in her mind
    and left the anguish behind

    you feel major releaf when she passes the test. it's like wow.....

    too much talent i think i'll go shoot myself
    keep writing.

    thanks for offering to comment back, i'm looking forward to that.

  • XxBloodLustxX
    November 24, 2006

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    Fantastic

    It rememindes me of so amny things like how we all face daily challenges in life and how we all want to be free. How sometimes we just come to the end of our tether and are just like " AHH I CAN'T DO THIS ANYMORE" but yet theres those moents of freedom and we are liek "yess ahh bliss.. for I an free." Sometimes we go through so much suffering and don't notice it but others do.. they try to save us from it.. but we are just to blind to see untill that very last moment untill we reach insanity...
    It was amazing
    Keep up the fantastic work
    Blessed be
    XxStephyxX

  • EmotionallyBeaten
    September 4, 2006
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    LOVED IT

    This is one of the most beautiful writes I have ever seen,I love it,I really liked this part,I love the rythme,the image it sends to my mind,and the word choice!
    "God, I'm sorry,
    I can't surpass this test"
    Tiptoed to the ledge
    Looked over the edge
    And leapt for her life
    the destination in her mind
    and left the anguish behind
    I think you need to put this in a contest,because i'm betting it would win!!!!PLEASE KEEP WRITING!!!!