This Moment
All the patchwork
tears we've cried
Brittle
fetters
chained in the basements
Of our emotions
All boundaries
all boundaries
I Looked in the sky and left for truth
When all I needed was your arms
Searching for your embrace
Hair, stroking the ocean screams wildly
In your absence
Love sometimes
Love always
Angels touching
Love sometimes
As they exchange their wings
A heartbeat without thought
Your memories are the same to me
Impulse, their touches
Dismissing they exchange their wings
While now this love
to eternity
while the mind
the breeze
Blowing us around
casualties
Of emotion
Inkling of nature
All the sun light touching you
me left jealous of the
king in the sky
blazing in His heat
purity of the passage of The "I" wanted
Yes to be the sun light
tracing your skin
Chasing
the wind
I catch your sent
Passion
Passion
To eternity
While now this moment
running on and on
Trying to dream
Of all in rain
And the sun lights the magic solution
of you and I
Our love
...
Survives
Steve Mels
Author notes
HMMMM!!!!
it's been a while
sorry if it not up to par.
Written July 22nd, 2006
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I truly enjoyed reading this piece you wrote. Honestly, I haven't been a member for too long and although I have been writing for the majority of my life, I will be the first to admit that I don't know much anout the rules and regulations when it comes to the many types of poetry. Despite my lack of knowledge, I feel that it is my passion for "words" that has made me the poet that I am today. Words are everything to me. They hold so much meaning and are full of endless possibilities. I'm certain that a writer of your nature would agree. Well, I guess that's why I enjoyed your poem so much... The words and the way you used them created something memorable. That alone, is truly amazing. Wonderful writing. I hope to see more
Kisses, Chrissy
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Wow. Today is a sad day for me, which I do not pften have, this realy spoke to me...even inspired tears.
Just beautiful!
Marianne
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great poem. i can feel the emotions dripping from it. If that wasnt up to par than i cant imagine what is. This was an excellent write. not average and outside that box. "all the sunlight touching you me left jealous of the king in the sky" brilant. this was an excellent write from an excellent writer and i cant wait to read more. keep them coming.
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WHAT A WAY TO...............
Express your love!!! You have definetly found your soulmate, and make that quite apparent!!!Your lovely word choices painted imagery so vivid that I could picture in my mind the two of you walking talking on the ocean the way you look at her hair stroking the waves fiercly. I could see the love in your eyes here and see why in the end, your great love survives!!! This was a beautiful story/poem!!!thanks for featuring this and giving the gift to the reader!!!~~Toni~~
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Great poem. So full of emotion and passion. I really enjoyed reading this piece. You are a very talented writer. Thank you for sharing such a heartfelt write. ttyl Tali
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AWESOME JOB!!!!! ENJOYED IT!!!!!
Steven
My dear sweet son
Your work is always up to par..... please continue penning, I will continue reviewing.....
Be blessed with love and light always.....
Love, MoM
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