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Hourglass

I know the way out of this world
listen to my heartbeat
and know the answer

it's elementary
life is but a dream,
row row your boat
your blood forms a stream

[pouring from]
deep inside myself
is the spectrum of colors
the intricate web,
where I imprisoned my thoughts of you...

drip drop drip drop,
don't let the beat stop.

Life is but a dream,
row row your boat
her blood forms a stream.

Author notes

Wrote this last night. Woohoo. Comments appreciated.
Written July 22nd, 2006

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  • sustaind
    July 24, 2006
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    its seems like love to me


  • Sapphire gold member
    July 23, 2006
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    Well, this is definately angst
    Great description and rhyming, kind of reminds me of grisly tales.
    I hope these thoughts aren't seriously running through your head.

    Sapphire


  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    July 22, 2006
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    This is creepy, intense and wonderful all at the same time. Great job on this!

    Write on!

    Kimberly G.

  • kissmeKillme
    July 22, 2006
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    Good job

    This poem is distubenly beautiful.
    I love this poem. My fav part is
    life is but a dream row row your
    boat her blood forms a stream.
    Its wonderful. Best of wishes.
    Heather