Sky is like indigo satin, pillow for gems, so bright,
precious universe crystals lightening in the night.
Between the stars resounds trembling soft voice
coming from the distance place, moon pale lunistice.
Peace on the earth, shadow's dances on the ground
owl's hunt, cat on the fence, summer cricket's sound.
A lonesome walker, steps damped but still enough loud
are running away from daily duties, from the crowd.
Open windows, curtain's game upon the light breeze,
the old log, cabin, mouse easy go around a cheese.
Birch-tree is covered with a soft green wedding veil,
nature's beauty presented with all perfect details.
Fresh water murmurs, river float toward its cascade
followed with a refrain of delicate guitar serenade.
Silky flowers petals are flying to kiss old river skin,
perfect dance twinkles in their romantic purple spin.
Ground is still warm, a breathing sleepy dark chest,
morning will come to feed us with a dew of her breast.
Author notes
Nature
Rhyming poetry with no any specific form
Written July 22nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- First Contest, Come and See! by superkurd13.
300 points, ended July 29, 2006, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thank you for your time to read and comment my work. It wasn't easy to express all my feelings and to paint it with verses. My muse do not want to work all the time by my side but when she is in some better mood she allow me to do something different nad maybe nice. Summer night is a good theme at the right time and from the right place.
~Sonja~ -
I felt like you were descrobing a beautiful summer day. I loved all the imagery. I especially loved these lines : "Sky like indigo satin, pillow for the gems so bright,
lightening precious universe crystals in the night." -
Thank you hAzZaRdOuS2uRhEaLtH (huh, what a name
) for your time to read and comment my work. I am glad you like i so.
~Sonja~ -
Imagery? don't even GO there... it was too amazing to explain. It was a calm, peaceful, and refreshing write, and it makes me wish I had more to say, but I can't say anymore, it was to wonderful for words to explain. But, I can say one thing: Keep the magic ink flowing from the magic pen at your magic fingertips.
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Thank you W. for your great comment and you are right about my mistake. I am glad you like it.
~Sonja~ -
Bits of pure magic.e.g. the opening line, and reference to flower petals kissing the rivers skin. Then the bits that keep up the imagry. owl, cat, walker, cricket sound. These are the lovely parts. But....I did not dig the last two lines ofthe first verse. No problem with the third verse,its great. Fourth verse---silky petals are flying---rather than is flying. Great finishing couplet.
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Thanks YT for so nice and precious comment and applause. I don't know where are you from, but here is not cold, we are in the middle of Summer. Iam glad if my verses could help to warm you.
~Sonja~ -
Perfect!
Woah wow that was absolutly beautiful! Finally! A REAL poem! That made these cold nights feel much warmer thank you for that! -
I am always sharing my poetry and all acumulated picture and feelings (well, almost all) with my dear readers. I am glad you foud worth to spent your time to read and comment my work.
~Sonja~ -
My Sister has accomplish a piece of poetry th
My dear you wrote the word of wisdom. You wrote what make us want to share an even with you. Sitting out on the porch drinking Iced Teas. Listen to the music and people talking. You must live in a town that houses are close together. I live in Iowa where the next door neightbe knew our business more than their own. lolsss IAm a person who love her counry. I live by the water and I go fishing when I want to. You did a beautiful job telling how life is where you are. -
Thank you Aaron. I am glad that my words fits your contest rules and that you like it.Thanks for this contest challenge and chance given to all of us.
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This, I must say, is a Terrific poem, and I mean that in the good way. The imagery is astounding, and I believe wtchr described the feeling adequately, "Summer Night is so calm and comforting. You've given peaceful images that lull the senses just as a balmy night would." Definately a fantastic piece. Thank you for entering, and good luck!
- Aaron -
Thank you Shilpa.
~Sonja~ -
wow...imagery at its best
you write so well
this ones another great write up from you
i always love and enjoy reading your poems
keep up the great job
cheers
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Summer Night is so calm and comforting. You've given peaceful images that lull the senses just as a balmy night would. The reference to the crickets call, the savvy little mouse, the quiet... all are so beautifully laced together in this wonderful write. You are very gifted in many areas but your nature writes are my favorite. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem.
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