Where tears fall
hatred,
bitterness,
grief,
all grow.
I would know.
I am
hatred,
bitterness,
grief,
all in one.
I am.
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Written July 22nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Who are you? by kyuuketsuki ai.
350 points, ended October 19, 2006, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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misery incarnate...rather frightening and bereaving.
reading this i pictured a grevious thorny amaranthine rose blooming beneath the drops of caustic acid rains.
Edited on Sep 21, 4:43 p.m. because 'life is full of misfortunate mistakes'. -
Indeed, you may want to work on something more of a filler, a real kick in the bum!
AKA (( Work on the feeling )) hehe
But I do have to say it was kind of like the other one and saying how you feel with your emotions.
Another well done job, keep it up.
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hmm ... this poem seems so detached for the amount of emotion it wants to portray, you might want to work on the feeling in it but other than that GREAT job
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