Consider me sad, Consider me unsound
My pen
My heart
My ink
My soul
Consider it all
Consider it me
I’m a normal person
Looking for a way out
Like a simple guy with eyes
That can’t seem to see
I am someone
I, do not, want to be
I say what I think
I mean what I say
I am a carpet,
Walked on
Every single day
I’m like wallpaper
You forget I’m there
I’m invisible
You look right through me
You think I’m tough
Maybe even mean
Its just
I have feelings
Unlike the rest
Of you Fucking machines
Consider me passionate, Consider me sullen
My pen
My heart
My ink
My soul
Consider it all
Consider it me
I walk through the desert
Expecting to find a stream, I do
My friends,
I’m glad for my friends
They give me a different perspective
And help me see life
Their exaggerated actions
Makes it appear like
Life is bad
I can pick flowers
And my friends
But not my dad
I like diversity
I love romantic surprises
As life is better
When there’s more
I have little
If any love
When I find love
I won’t have to think twice
I am Ostracized
And left out in the dark
I’m not seen as one in a billion
I’m seen as
A small guy in a big world
Consider me lonely, Consider me misunderstood
My pen
My heart
My ink
My soul
Consider it all
Consider it me
I grew up with false parents
Unlike any child should
I have no one
Who knows me
They only guess who I am
By what they see
The memories I like
Are the ones I cannot keep
The memories I hate
Are the ones I cannot lose
They’re the only ones I have
Such as bullies
Such as Belding
A school from my past
Now, when I look around school
I only see
Herds of sheep
I am never alone
Except at home
But I am always lonely and misunderstood
They say take the drugs
I said only an idiot should
Therefore I would
High on medications
High on dreams
To me life,
Is never as it seems
The image is distorted
There’s more
There’s less
And often
I’m completely wrong
Consider me an observer, Consider me Blind
My pen
My heart
My ink
My soul
Consider it all
Consider it me
I can step outside my body
But still see the real me
I have eyes that can see
When in school
I see
The lonely
The left out kids wishing to make bombs
The popular guys with their girlfriends
Shallow people with other perfections
They're always together
I'm sure you see them to
But I see the world in all its color
Too bad its only black and white
Nothing full of happiness
No mercy
No life
Consider me someone new; Consider me an expert
My pen
My heart
My ink
My soul
Consider it all
Consider it me
Changing is something we all go through
From Holding hands, being wild
To Holding back tears, faking smiles
From From mommy and daddy love you so much
To Realizing no one cares and life is tough
From cute clothes, beach blond hair
To A dark shade of black, due to knowing, no one cares
From singing joyously, dancing in the rain
To Felling all the pressure, getting all the blame
From “we’ll be friends forever”, that was the best ever
To “Friends for this year”, putting hearts through the shredder
From knowing and doing nothing, being more than happy
To Knowing too much, except how to be involved how to pretend to be content
Consider me a book of science; Consider that knowlege useless;Consider me useless
My pen
My heart
My ink
My soul
Consider it all
Consdier it me
I sit here in my room
Alone, just me and my laptop
And the internet
With nothing for me to do
So of all things I could do
I do not much
Just expand knowlege
Look for information
On physics and chemistry
But I somehow
Don't follow all these rules
So All I Learn Is A Lie!!!
So what I do enstead
Since I don't want to feel like an alien
I Turn that knowlege
Into creative abilities
I write poetry
Draw a little bit
And try to figure out
How to daydream and breathe
At the same time
Consider me defenseless; Consider me a soldier
My legs
My chest
My arms
My body and mind
I am an army of one
Able to take care of myself and yet not at all
I depend on people to make life not boring
I depend on people to help me do things day to day
But I still train alone
I can easily be killed as it is
I'm defenseless
I'm just preparing for Basic Training
Then I will be a soldier
Be ready to take on anything, anyone
And yet I will be defenseless alone
For even the most powerful needs allies
In the next year,
I will gain many powerful enemies
But even more importantly I will gain allies
So I will not be defenseless like I am now
Consider it Crazy-Dan; Consider it me Quesidilla
My Pen
My Heart
My Ink
My M16
Consider it all
Consider it me
I was but a punk
Before the army changed me
Now I am a private
I have lost the crazy in me
The intense love and need of danger, adrenaline
I came in a genious
I left questioning everything
For on the battle field
You need little intellegence
Using instinct and skill alone
I have changed completely
In only 3 months
The only thing the same
My love for others
My need for others love
My need for others acceptence
My resources of uniqueness
Must be exhausted
For when I look around in formation
All I see is a herd of steed
Ready and willing for slaughter
And I am one
Ready, Willing, Able and Proud
My name changed in basic
Also changed my character
I was Crazy-Dan
Now I'm Quesidilla
I would've never guessed
That I changed this much
Consider Me Quesadilla; Consider Me Shadow
My pen
My heart
My ink
My soul is missing
Lost my life one time
For a friend
And after I gained my life back
I lost all of them from my life
I would've rather be dead
I changed my nickname
Because I outgrew Crazy-Dan
And yet, I have changed with my name again
I am less responsive to emotion
I can barely hear
I have no friends
The changes came so quick
I wasnt prepared
As fast as me hitting the ground
Did my life
Did I change forever
And so I write here and now
A shadow of who I was
A shadow of whom I will become
Consider Me Shadow
All above is me
Consider it so
Consider it all; Consider me all of these...
Blind
Crazy-Dan
Defenseless
An Encyclopedia of Science
An Expert
Lonely
Misunderstood
An Observer
Passionate
Quesidilla
Sad
Shadow
A soldier
Someone New
Some one useless
Sullen
Unsound
Consider it all
As I’m considered me
Author notes
Yes it is just plain odd, i know...
But that's how i descibe me
And for everything that has defined me there is a chapter as I call it, its really just a named section
i've been developing this one remaking it since i was about 13
In a list
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Comments
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Originality: (9/10)
Emotion: (8/10)
Poetic devices: (13/20)
Structure/flow: (7/10)
Cohension: (8/10)
Title relating to poem: (9/10)
Personal opinion: (7/10)
Syntax: (8/10)
Diction: (8/10)
Total:77/100
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Well…this is by-far the best poem I’ve ever read. I love the different analogies you used to described yourself and how you say I am this but I am also this. You wrote your emotions and how you really feel about life really well. I personally think that this is one of the best, ok in the top three best poems I’ve ever read and it really really made me think on how I see life. This is one of those poems where it hit me hard. You wrote a lot of thing a would never have the guts to say….this really….man if I could tell you what really this means I would I would explain it to you….I really love this piece..much love your baby Sis Dawn
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I really like the repeating stanza and how you change the first line of that each time, its very powerful. The whole poem flows very well. I've never read anything like this.
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this is a reallly good way to describe yourself
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wow thats a really good peom! comment back!
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hmmmm....
interesting poem here. I didn't understand it in the beginning but as I read along, I started to get it. It was very unique and brilliant!
Bravo!!!! This is going into my bookmarks.
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nicely done
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This is an AWESOME poem. I love this one, can understand how you feel, and totally relate. Good write, and good luck in the finals.
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wow
Long contest entry list. This poem obviously means a lot to you on a personal level. I don't think it seems weird at all. Just a candid and revealing poem that shows a lot about your background, your present life, and the bright future ahead of you.
I loved the use of repetition in this poem. It really pulled it together. Though lengthy, it didn't seem too lengthy at all and kept my interest to the very end.
There are some spelling and grammatical errors that I think distract the reader. You have "from" listed twice at hte begining of "from from mommy and daddy love you". You need to be careful not to use "to" and "too" interchangably. There were a couple of other minor spelling errors that I think you'll easily find and fix.
I really love the idea of it the most though. You're not really asking for much from people. You're not begging for them to love you or to understand you - just to see you as you are and consider it. I love that. Very well done!!!
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Oh I love it. Truly wonderful job. I love how you kept incorporating "Consider it all, consider it me"....wow such a wise statement!! Wonderful job poet, however there were a few typos...but it was a good read anyways!
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Well written, good luck in the contest.
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wow
That was very deep... it your feelings out ~ the one chance you can let it hang out~ without feeling of recourse... I hope your world gets brighter, it's funny how life is just as you described for some~ but, trust me everyone has they're day to shine! Nice poem~ THANKS for entering my contest~ Nice to meet ya! -
Wow this is so honest and true. I love your words of honesty and how you see the world. I can totally relate to your write. Great Job!
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Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. I am not a fan of dark poetry and poor me poetry. However this is very well written and although I do not agree with the content, I will applaud your writing talents and your ability to put your emotion into words. You have done an excellent job with this piece.
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this was lovely and did described you and was worth allowing pre writes for. it was a very descrtiptive poem and it really got me thinking. thnx for the entry and good luck.
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Consider it all, eh? In that case, I consider you a great person. ^-^
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oh my, it's like a combinatation of poems pulled together with on sweet line.
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its long.. and good,, im tellin' you, you could really take over the world, you know,,build an army or somethin'.. go!.. make those assholes pay,,
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This is a good piece right here. It's deep and thought provoking. The best of luck to you in the contest.
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hey. This is an amazing peice of talent!! it is very long, but does not throw the reader into fits of boredome!! it captivates and almost demands attention from the reader!! that is veri hard to do through a computer screen, but u seem to have nailed that!! i love how right in the middle, the poem seems to in a way just turn 180, and totally change. u know what i mean?? this is my favorite part of the whole poem: Consider me sad, Consider me unsound
My pen
My heart
My ink
My soul
Consider it all
Consider it me, for some reason the repetition of those lines, just left me in awe. great write!! love: paint -
I love romantic surprises
As life is better
When there’s more
aww hun, this is so heart-wrenchingly honest.
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Long but wow! This is very well done! Thanks so much for entering my contest! Your a wonderful poet! Good luck! My favourite lines were "
You think I’m tough
Maybe even mean
Its just
I have feelings
Unlike the rest
Of you Fucking machines
Consider me passionate, Consider me sullen
My pen
My heart
My ink
My soul
Consider it all
Consider it me" Thanks again and good luck
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This is very nice. it has a good flow and convey of feelings, which are strong. Very creative format. I would suggest useing more puncuation. Otherwise, job well done!
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i'd use more puncuation if i knew puncuation well I thought I had every thing
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so i'm assuming this is the longer one. i agree with you,it is better. uh huh. more to it,and more ideas put across. none the less,it's still just as powerful as the other one. i'm glad you entered this one too. so thank you for entering,and good luck.
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By now means is this odd to me, its awesome......and im stunned
I wish you the best....I liked it very much!
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you made me laugh, and the reason i called it odd
because when i first made it it was so wierd for people to see it had "chapters" -
This is amazing, not odd! I've never read a poem like this before, my new favorite! Keep up the good work.
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Thank you, you do realize (not calling you stupid by saying this) spell check doesn't catch every spelling mistake, if it wasn't for spell check about 1/10 words would be spelled wrong
But i still believe you, i just checked it over and i couldn't find the mistakes, can you tell me what they are if they're really bad, plz and ty -
very passionate, it's beautiful and has a fantastic message, it did have a few spelling mistakes though, and it would have been nice if you'd spell checked, like it said in the rules... but there we have it, i wish you good luck in all your writing and good luck in the contest
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that's exactly what i was goin' for.
I want people to know the true me, not the mask of a happy person they see, if that, usually they look right through me. -
i'm just takin' a stab at what i hit, but in here i hit alot of nerves of different emotions. Mostly sympathy...
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i loved this i was crying by the time i finished
you hit something with this one
amazing work
keep it up
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HELL YEAH!
This stanza F*in ROCKS.
"You think I’m tough
Maybe even mean
Its just
I have feelings
Unlike the rest
Of you Fucking machines"
This poem gives me a feel for the real you, you did a great job!!! I applaud you!
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