All her doubts swirl in her head
She's tired of this life and wishes she was dead
The razor unmercifully tears her wrist
When she's in the ground with the insects will she be missed
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She's sick of all the misery and fights
Too long has she stayed up crying at night
She sifts through her memories, how they will be missed
But the cold blood leaks effortlessly from her beaten wrist
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Her tears are nothing but pitiful drops of sin
She fought the battles, but it's the war she didn't win
The long days go by, and her heart turns cold
She can't find the truth after the lies she has been told
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Everyday she's faced with the weakening pain
The pain that leaves her wounds laced in shame
She went out of her way for people who never cared
It's exactly that attitude that brought her this nightmare
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She hates looking into the mirror, she hates what she sees
She has become everything she never wanted to be
There's no way out, she is in over her head
The proof is on the blood-stained sheets on her bed
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The stereo blares as she screams her heart out
They echo on the walls, mocking her inner doubts
Her unwanted pain is all too real
It's turned her numb, after all it's all she feels
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How she begs silently it will go away
But in the back of her mind, she knows it is hear to stay
So she writes that note and signs it goodbye
After all she did wish to die
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All her doubts swirl in her head
She grew tired of this life and now she's dead
Author notes
Hmmm i don't know if this is good or not. It all came to me. so yeah just tell me what you think.
Written July 21st, 2006
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I loved the imagery of this poem. It flowed so well and i really felt for this poor person with so much pain. Absolutely great writing.
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this is depressing...this image of the girl is so sad. it makes me want to reach out to her and grab her in a hug and tell her that everything will be ok..but you conveyed everything in such a powerful stroke of words..amazing job..you have such talent..i love it..keep it up!
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Thank you so much for the fantastic comment. It was very much appreciated
Isabel
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Beautiful piece. Just birll
Oh wow this is amazing. I really loved the flow of it, and how it rhymed. Brilliant. The imagery was magnificent, and your word choice was fab. Excellent write. So sad, yet so beautifully written. Great emotions! -
this is amazing! i loved it, its so sad and dark, you have so much talent im in
Abused
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I really enjoyed this poem.
I could feel and see the girl in her room screaming along to her music.
Teh-Perfect-Tragedy took all the words from my mouth. XD
[[Channyn]]
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Holy Fu.ck! This poem kicked A.ss!!!!! Very dark and a great flow. The ending ties it all together... Somehow I can see this poem having a sequel. But that's just me. Keep up the great writing skills. No, scratch that, Keep Kicking A.ss!
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Wow, I actually read this LONG ass poem. It's a really awesome poem. I liked it a lot. Your right! It does ryhm! I really did read this poem, and I really did like it. It was an amazing write. Loved it, as much as I LOVES YOU!
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Thanks for commenting. It's always appreciated! =)
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Thanks Jess for your kick ass comment lol. Yeah i agree with you, i felt the flow wasnt a great as it could've been. thanks again =]
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^-^ Lovely. I felt the flow was a little awkward, but otherwise it was fabulous. The rhyming was great and the emotion and pain in this is just amazing. I also really liked some of the phrases in this, such as "She sifts through her memories, how they will be missed
But the cold blood leaks effortlessly from her beaten wrist"
Lovely job ^-^ My applause.
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Very talented
Truely talented. It's seriously great. It has a lot of emotion and there need to be more poetry that has that. It's great.
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This is a really good poem.You can truly feel this girl's pain and her wish to end her life.The raw emotion makes it so real and i think that this poem is something many people may be able to relate to.Great write.
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