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Beneath the Eyes of Reality

The threads of my heart are slowly
unraveling into a million pieces
for which you slowly sew back into
the exact right places in my soul

Your touch induces me into a coma
of nervous anticipation where in time
you will satisfy my every waking fantasy
of lust and love in more ways than one

A kiss upon my brow, a melody of relaxing
promises to come under the stars and full moon
Hiding childishly beneath sheets of sins

The motion of our bodies in perfect sync
as temptation manifests into desire which
is to great to ever be filled

Lazily laying left and right, shoulder to shoulder
soul to soul, spirit to spirit

And as it is time to say our goodbyes
a hesitant wish to which I never enjoy
Separated only by the hatred of the people
surrounding us in our lives

Until the next night or day or time
Where our romeo and Juliet romance shall continue
I bid you safe farewell, and with one last kiss
I love you


Author notes

i have had writers block for like 3 months now, so i tried... thats all i have to say
Written July 20th, 2006

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  • tragediey-stricken
    July 21, 2006
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    good

    i really liked this poem. you did a great job to be having writers block.

    trag-

  • FindingFate
    July 21, 2006
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    As you know from the reason of this contest I have it as well...it sucks...I love the love described here but it was not an explosion of beauty and metaphors as I had hoped. I am sorry and please don't take it personal. I am just being really picky...Trina