elaborate divinity
growling from the pit of my stomach
inhuman rage
what give you the right to be so righteous?!?!
you think you were the only one in the right
I was always wrong
wrong until my last drop of blood hit the floor
in a simple gentle
echo...
distant and forever false
just like our love
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So this is short, but hey, it gets the point across. I was mad. Isn't it obvious?
Written July 16th, 2006
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I can't say I haven't been here too. I've had my fair share of burns. I've had my fair share of people that claimed they loved or cared about me but the whole concept of the expression seemed so goddamn deluded that it didn't seem anywhere close to real. So this sound off to me loud. Man your writing has an uncanny way of touching all of my sore spots. This is really good shit keep it up.
Edited on Aug 08, 9:28 p.m. because ''. -
She's good folks, she is good!
Came through loud and clear dear! I promise never to leave you standing for dinner.
JUst kidding, very,very nice and pointed.
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I once read a poem that was one setnence long but it was the bets poem I ever read. The length doesn't matter as long as those few words you write say a lot. This poem is an example; there is hate and pain in your words but its not the longest thing you've ever written. You did an awesome job hun keep it up!
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wow, I wasn't expecting to get a response to this so quickly seeing how I just posted it five minutes ago. Thanks though. Loves a bitch, isn't it?
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i love this poem...i definitelly know what that feels like, im going through it right now..it sucks...but beauty comes from sadness keep up the good work
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