Crimson blood lined the bullets covering the floor;
A masterpiece was painted, something too pretty to ignore.
Frayed rope strangled a noose around her neck,
This girl, a mockery, of a little fucking wreck.
Her breath sang lullabies in an invisible tune,
Numbing the pain in her head that afternoon.
Broken glass from a bottle, cutting the fear away;
This girl's blurred reflection had been her only prey.
She was a sweet catastrophe written with blood
As it fell from her wrist in a cowardly flood.
Images had remained in her aching head
Because every memory meant the more she bled.
With all the bottles she had broken and smashed,
The bullet had finally been shot and crashed.
A masterpiece was painted, something too pretty to ignore
And her beautiful corpse hung from a hook atop the door.
Author notes
I haven't written anything in a while; I've basically lost my ability to write. Please, just tell me what you think.
Written July 20th, 2006
What did you think
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Amazing
That was great. I love how it all tied together at the end, and I can really feel the emotion. The first stanza really brought out the emotional feelings to the poem. Yo're still great.
&Rae
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I love this.
especially the first stanza
"A masterpiece was painted, something too pretty to ignore.
Frayed rope strangled a noose around her neck,
This girl, a mockery, of a little fucking wreck"
that was amazing.
I usually dont like poems about this, but this one was realy great, the flow was wonderful too =]
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Amy, you have once again blew me away. I don't know how to put it. Your words were truly astonishing. The whole story was brillant. The rhymes were perfect and the rhythm was very well done as well.
I'm sorry I haven't been on here that much lately, but I am going to be on here more now that I think I have lost my writers block.. at least I hope so. ;]
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Holy Fu.ck.
Holy FU.CK!!!!!!!!!!!! This poem kicked A.ss!!!!!!! If you say again that you have so called 'lost the ability to write' I will personally come over there and smack you sh.itless! This piece is simply amazing, Amy, and I think I'll go read it again and again until it is burned to the inside of my eyelids and I can quote it word for word with ease. It's dark, it's sad, it's morbid and full of emotion. I love it.
Remember: I WILL personally smack you sh.itless if you say you can't write. Keep it up. I mean it.
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Wow, this is really good! It's dripping in emotion and suspense. You're an amazing writer, dear. I love your work, ending sums it all up. Awesome write, love ya!
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Amy, you have not i repeat NOT lost your ability to write. This piece was simply stunning and i cant get over how much it took my breath away. Dark, sad, morbid, I LOVE IT! Beautiful job. keep it up!
Much love
Isabel
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Oh Wow!!! That was a really good poem...I really like the first stanza. It really got my attention and it started out AWESOME!!! Great job and keep writing!
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