I need somebody to hold my hand today.
Do I dare? Anybody care?
I lost my fate
on the fine line
between the love and hate.
Mom, can you do that now for me?
May I be your little girl again?
I need some love.
I need it today.
I need somebody who will not ask
why my tears flows so fast
and my pale face frowns.
I need some love.
I need it today.
Just a little moment to bring back
a part of my life full of joy,
live with no dirty words.
I need some love.
I need it today.
Part of my childhood still in my heart
want to sing and want do dance,
asking for a little romance.
I need some love.
I need it today.
I need a chance.
Mom? Can you hold my hand again?
Mom? Just for awhile?
Do you remember me?
May I be your little girl again?
I need some love.
I need it today.
I want to be me.
I just want to chase my butterfly...
I want to play stars again,
to dance barefoot on the rain,
I want to dig the gold in the sand...
Just hold my hand
and say to me
that
it wasn't my past;
everything was only a bad dream.
But, I will not ask
I will put back my funny mask
and I will smile,
for awhile.
Author notes
Written July 20th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- a fine line between love & hate by goodbye carnivale.
1187 points, ended August 30, 2006, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oh my the tears in my eyes this is spoken with such honesty straight from a inner child love this write beautiful in so many ways....
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Thank you Abscessed for your time to read and comment my poetry and for good wishes. It's not always easy to write this way and to pour out personal emotions, but it worth to do it from time to time.
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what a beautiful poem with emotions and nostalgia just overflowing through it.
I was just reading through the contest entries and they all seem to be much more morbid than yours...but yours retains a gentleness that works
Good luck in the contest
abscessed
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Thank you Damselflydreams, I am glad you found it worth to read and coment and of course for good wishes
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this is a very brave work, well done, with the repetition adding strngth to the style. Good rhythm, a very good read. Best of luck.
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Thank you Linda for your light and love.
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Thank you Brian.
~Sonja~ -
That's true Shilpa fro all of us. We all need to be protected but nowadays are somehow too busy time for all of us. Thanks for so nice and precious comment.
~Sonja~ -
so sad, but we all felt that way at one time, wonderfully expressed as you detailed the youth of your past, thank you for sharing this with us..MM
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sonja my friend..we all need some love every day...we are lost wihtout it...fine write girl...brian.. ..
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wow..this is one piece i'd come back to again n again
wonderful..left a tear in my eyes
i see you have got loads of comments on this one
and this ones really worth it
loved the depth and the flow
this one relates to all in some or the other way and each has a different way of looking at it
i would rather take the literal meaning coz thats so much what i want
life just so wiered , thr was this one time that i used to confide in my mum with every little thing that happened around..tell her all the fine details of my day and now jus few yrs older , i feel i have grown up and te distance btwn the best frnds (mum) has somehow grown too..well she is still the same but i probably have been a bit too busy ..ironical that she never was..she always had time for me..
thanx for sharing this one
really a touching poem and a wonderful write
great going
i always like your poem n this ones just one on the top
best of luck in the contest [ ]
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As always you are able to see the things very deep. Thanks for comment and just bee what you are, kind and full of love and support.
~Sonja~ -
As you said, we all have those moments...and the only way to deal with them is to share it with the good friend like you are. Thanks Sam for your comment and all kind of support.
~Sonja~ -
Bring Back Memories.
Your poem tell me of a Old woman who you call Mother is unable to see or understand and do not remember you as a child that she use to smile and play. Now we look at oue mother and say to ourselves. If I could have just one wish. My wish is to see my MOther Smile and remember the time we spent together. You sound like your was a beautiful relationship with you mother.
I once had to go to a nursing home for a good freind of mine. . Iam just here to comfort you to the end. -
I think we all have moments of insecurity, moments when we are tired, moments when we'd like comforting. More than most of us will admit, there are times we'd like to stop being grown up, stop being responsible, stop being depended on. Your poem is YOUR wistful wish, but I am very greedy... I want to share it.
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Thank you my dear Princess.
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hi dear Sonja
This is wonderful and very beautiful.
Wish you the best luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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May we go together back to our childhoods? You, with your marbles, me with my sand to dig imaginative gold again? My family life were so poor but with my childhood blessed with my imagination I was rich as a queen. Thank you for your good wishes dear mina.
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Walt, you caught the right term "butterfly moments". This is the main points dear friend. I am glad you lie this verses but I don't like to feel like that.
~Sonja~ -
Yes Kevin, probably we all have it from time to time. I am not realy used to think this way, but it also happend to me too.
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Me too want to go back to my childhood to my mum
... it's beautiful worded sonja... it's packed with emotions... good luck in the contest...
mina
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Excellent
Sonja, wonderful, wonderful, you speak for alot of us. Others have already remarked on this as well. Me, well, I didn't have it that good in childhood, so I can take it or leave it. But if I could chose "butterfly" moments, there are a couple I would like...but that's another tale. You did such a great job with the repetition here and I could just feel you and see you today...talkin' to your mama, wantin' to reach out and touch her again...from faraway. Man, that is so poignant. I love it. Well done. Walt. -
FEELINGS WE ALL HAVE HAD, WONDERFULLY EXPRESS
I think we all have had this exact same feeling many times in our lives, I know I have. A wonderful poem my dear friend.
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Thank you dear Dawn.
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Excellent
Well penned! Found myself sighing...to go back to those days, not all good, but to know the importance of our childhood like we do now would be so much fun. I would still be swinging!
Excellent, emotional write my friend.
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Thank you Nermin. From time to time ... well, I would like to be back to some special time, but I am sure that some things will miss me. It wasn' easy to be child, but I'd like to be back for awhile. To collect the best pictures and to make a perfect dream, or to collect the perfect dreams and to create a perfect future?
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so so beautiful
my dear, it is so beautifu. i want to go back to childhood, and in fact my heart, i feel, didnt grow at all and that is my ordeal, i want my childhood back, maybe i could redo my past to let it be my future. Alas, no one can change his fate.
wonderful words capturing our dreams and expressing them right.
it is so amazing dear sonja
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