We stand upon the front line, boys we are made into men,
I am fighting for my country, scared to death I may never see my family again,
I am wearing my cackys no longer my jeans and shirt,
I block out all the things I see upfront of me, men laying dyeing and hurt.
At my next stop I will you write a letter I hope it reaches you, my family I am ok,
I am one of the lucky ones that get to go on to live another day,
It's so cold at night I miss my nice warm cozy bed,
I miss the picture of my family that hung over my head.
I wear the cross I got for my sixteenth birthday around my neck I hold it tight at night,
I sometimes ask the lord why did it have to be me? I don't want to ever fight,
I would rather hold my baseball mitt and play in the park then hold this machine gun,
why can't the world understand that in war, that no war is never really won.
Innocent life's are taken away, just another one of the brave,
That kid was just 19 years old that had to meet an earlier crave,
I better call it a night we head out tomorrow at the first sight of the sun,
I will end this letter with I love you all, love your your eldest one.
I am marching through the bush now, my head I have to hold up high,
I watch planes fly from over above bombs lighting up an other wise blue sky,
The birds I use to here singing are drowned out buy gun fire,
A blast I here up ahead someone tripped the bomb wire,
I have to block out the screaming, I have to move on,
on the outside I am as cold as steal on the inside I am not so strong.
I came into gun fire on this day I was lucky again to survive,
23 of us were in our platoon 9 of us are still alive,
pray for me won't you, that I will return home in perfect condition if I can,
You may not recognise me when I return, I was the little boy forced to become a man.
Author notes
This is something I feel alot of soldiers may feel inside them selfs so those of you who take the time to read this thank you hope you enjoy.
Written July 20th, 2006
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Nice poem. I think you've captured the emotion of a soldier pretty well.
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Wow
That is a very good poem. I love how it describes how a soldior might feel. You did a very good job. Keep up the good work.
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Hye man as a member of the australian army i must say that was graet really hit home keep up the good work
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wow that really is a powerful piece you have there. I realate to this because my ex fiance (the father of my 2 children) is a soldier. you really draw from raw emotion and it shows in your work. Great poem
Falon
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Muy Bueno
Gave me chills... You have so much power in your words. Yet another poem that astonishes me. You speak the way of the world. Not yet said by anyone else. You speak from the heart. Very good poem. =) -
Today is 9-11, and I've been seeing memorials all day on TV. Your poem makes me just as sad because the futures of young men and women are being sacrificed everyday to appease the god of war. Truth is, he seems to be insatiable. Your say it all beautifully and I hope the carnage is not in vain. I wonder at 'humanity.' What do we see when we look at our children, what do we leave them?
Be blessed!
~Klassy
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James, This is a great example of your wonderful talent.I am amazed by the way you write and this war poem touches my heart more than any I've read so far. GBY!
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VERY GOOD TOPIC
Hey Big Bro,
VERY GOOD!!!!
It was like i was
watching a movie how
well you described everything.
In year 10 i did a poem very
similar to this one......
Keep up the great work
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I do especially like this poem and the ending really sets it off! Good work, and you can be proud of this!
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omg . this write is SO powerful . i 'specially like the last 4 lines . this write was so touching . i loved how you wrote it . the rhyme sheme is gr8 . this is ..... wow ......
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Excellent-poem,Indeed'
Dear James R; Well I am not a soldier,but I do have-4-cousins,fighting overseas,and I '
Pray' for their safe, return home,everyday! One is in The Navy,One In The Air-Force,One in The Marines,and one,in The Army. My cousin,Ronny,is stationed on the front lines of,Istanbul,Turkey.He is the Marine. Wonderful-tribute-Write,to everyone. 'God Bless All Of Our-Troops'.....Love,your friend,Shirley ann shaw-raytown,mo.64133.... -
nice, love the sentiment in this piece, clever use of words, "why can't the world understand that in war, that no war is never really won." VERY clever line! Can you give me more details on the magazine please? sorry I am vain and would love to see my name in print lol
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This is a beautiful story for a soldiers point of view. you have a great deal of natural talent James!
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awesome
Oh wow James, this is AMAZING!!!!
Who cares about some spelling mistakes or anything, this write
is POWERFUL, touching and real
One of the best war poems I have ever read
Keep it up always, I hope this goes into your magazine
Stay safe
Keep up the great work
Love to you, my AP Daddy
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Applaude Yo'self
I loved the way you expressed yourself in this one...I really feel 4 those who go into war...it's a game of roulette...but,this was written fabolously......... -
i cried. wow. this was a really powerful piece. great poem. keep up the awesome work!
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all i can say is...WOW
Wow, this brought tears! Its a beautiful poem! It gives the respect to the people serving in this war. It's heartfelt, and just amazing. I'm glad someone can capture the aspect of being in the war, and how they feel, I'm sure if soldiers read this, they would completely agree with every single word, thats how good it is! It's so hard realizing the people out there, dying, you really put it in perspective, from their point of view, thank you! keep it up!
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this is an excellent view on war....i like it...i have family and some friends family in a war i think its sad....some of them have died
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Very beautiful, I am crying!! Great write keep it up!
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Excellent poem, this is so true men and women are forced to grow up way to fast these days Take care
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wow, what a great write.. My cousin Scott is currently over in Iraq and it's hard here without him and I know it is even harder for him....
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This is so touching, I really dread the day I have to say goodbye to some one close to me and send them to a place where they might not return from. It is truly heartbreaking, good write, very good.
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This is a really good write!11! H x
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a very worthy tribute
this is one heartfelt write from the heart of many people who i know feel this same way. It is written with respect for the man/woman on the ground doing it hard. This give credit to these people who put themselves at risk for us and as you say not because they want to get out there and fight. War is an outdated useless weapon on humanity.
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wow, this is amazing! that last line hits ya so hard! I have written a poem about soldiers as well, its not posted up but it is along the same lines of this, i think i called it the "Battlefield Soldiers Cry" and its about a soldier who is faced with death and gives in and i think i ended it
"We need to end the war
Before more of my commrads fall"
something like that..
I hope you fix the contest thing I will enter, my boss is being shipped off in september to iraq, so we are all sober tone in here...
~Your Girlfriend~
Abused
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BRILLIANT
Thank you for writing such a masterpiece this is a true feeling of so many at the moment who have to fight for their countries if only th one's in power could stop it and no more would loose their lives very well written well done
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