Porcelain Face
Porcelain breaks
Pain behind this shallow surface...
One more time
And it will break
The flawless shine -
Illusion hides what lies behind...
Face like porcelain
Skin so pale
Positioned glass eyes
Reflecting your will
Red drawn lips
A doll's mouth, shut
Not supposed to speak
Never tried
Gave in to fear
Porcelain Face
Porcelain breaks
Pain behind this shallow surface...
One more time
And it will break
The flawless shine -
Illusion hides what lies behind...
Porcelain face
Feels no cold touch
Expression fixed
No mimics changing
Lifeless eyes with a
Colourless green
A doll's emotionless sight
Not supposed to change
Because nothing lies behind
Porcelain Face
Porcelain breaks
Pain behind this shallow surface...
One more time
And it will break
The flawless shine -
Illusion hides what lies behind...
Porcelain slowly breaks
By forces pushing from inside
Eyes now slightly show fear
Anxious of losing
The protective porcelain mask
Not supposed to show
The vulnerable soul
That lies behind
Porcelain face
Porcelain breaks
Pain behind this shallow surface
Too much of this held inside
This time it breaks
The flawless shine
Not capable to hide what lies behind
Author notes
Written July 20th, 2006
A contest entry
- PREWRITES!!!!!! by Luminescence.
450 points, ended March 5, 2008, 69 entries
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Oh. This is a really sad little poem that you have going on here. It sounds like you've been going through some rough things in your life and that's what made you feel like a cold and lifeless doll. I hope that you're feeling better these days. You did a good job of expressing yourself.
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Just plain truth of the life and the plain descrtiption of the heart in a wonderful poetry.....Well done my friend..I love it..My thanks for sharing it
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"Red drawn lips
A doll's mouth, shut
Not supposed to speak"
my favorite line.
this piece flows so musically.
masks indeed.
brilliant.
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bravo
A neat and nifty poem so deftly done with a good repeating stanza (I would suggest that in line 16 you might change it to "Given to fear", as you currently have the wrong tense which is very jarring to the reader.) bravo... bravo.. bravo..
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UNIQUE
Pregnant with deep meanings the poem makes us ponder over our existence which appears to be surreal. Are we real or an illusion? Who knows. We are so fragile and this thought makes us pensive! Liked this poem very much.
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This was wonderful!! you expressed so much here.. The flow was smooth and almost flawless, and the imagery was so wonderful.. I really loved reading this.. Thanks for sharing..
Angel
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Hey how come my clappies arn't here....this means one thing....more clappies
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This is beautiful
A slow increase of tension through the constant repetition... it's like, well, a good song has to be (8-11 minutes or so) and takes you away for a while. Congrats to this poem, Götz
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Very nicely written... I loved the repetion throughout the piece... it brought it together.
Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck,
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Just so powerful as always, the you inside, killing stopping your heart to beat, pushing the pain inside more as you breathe, someone is pulling you and it's so hard to get out.....
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I felt compelled to read this after the comment you made on my poem...this is brilliant! Fine porelain can also be quite translucent, which is how I am feeling at the moment, thank-you for leading me to this piece, it is truly amazing!
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good
This is really good. I loved how you portrayed the porcelain face with the facade we put up and hide behind. We seem to coat it and coat it over and over with more shellac, like a protective coverage to the world. I really loved this. -
This is a wonderful poem and it is indeed very much like my poem The Stage of Life. I guess its a universal problem, that effects many of us. Great Write-RAE
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This was a very interesting concept. It created some very unique mental images. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Excellent
wow, amazing poem!! it is a very unique idea. you are very talented writer. keep up the great work!
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"Porcelain Face Porcelain breaks Pain behind this shallow surface" I understand that completely, I have the same problem as Ravensdark.... I'm speachless (Which is tricky for me)
Orbs -
this is awesome!
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Your a great writer. I always struggle for the right words after reading something you've written. You express yourself brilliantly.
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wow, sounds kinda like how i feel day in and day out. great write. love it.
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