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Night chased away the weakening day, and the sun was slow to depart,
Resting on warm white yielding sand, that moment warmed all my heart.
Seagulls were flying franticly seeking, a roost for the approaching night,
Billowing clouds huddled above glowed, fiery gold as if they were alight.
Breakers marched in and loudly broke, and then danced upon the shore,
Wet sand repeated the painting overhead, as my emotions began to soar.
As darkness showed her relentless might, and awoke small sleeping stars,
Softly glimmering happily like glow worms, held in glass bottles and jars.
Contentment flowed full through my veins and a smile formed on my face,
Gazing with attention at the girl by my side and the beauty of this place.
Tenderly smiling she rolled towards me, into my eager outstretched arms,
I gazed with approval at her nude brown body and softly fulsome charms.
We kissed and cuddled on the sand relaxed, both exploring in a casual way,
Marvelling at her soft warm brown skin, that shimmered in a sensuous way.
The twilight made her body glow bronze, which a breeze tenderly caressed,
A breeze gentle and sweetly cooled the beads, on her pretty face and breast.
I savoured her soft responding supple flesh, between my five fondling fingers,
Causing powerful and erotic feelings to grow, an emotion that forever lingers.
My manhood began growing impatiently, under that overhead dimming light,
Building until in all its hardened glory it was, a friendly but menacing sight.
When the time approached for meeting, into her warm wet waiting place,
I entered deep and smoothly completely, watching smiles form on her face.
So we explored all the heavens and worlds, a million miles away from here,
Building up feelings and emotions sublime, both grinning from ear to ear.
The moment at last arrived for us to listen, to music that only angels sing.
To an orgasmic peak together we came and wished forever there to cling.
Time stood still as we remained as one, a solitary piece of untainted love,
Both frozen jointly in complete harmony with the wondrous setting above.
For never can heavenly bonds be broken, on this idyllic small island grand,
Where love is mixed with the moon and stars and the golden twilight sand.
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Author notes
poetic movement
In a list
A contest entry
- NEO SOUL: POETIC MOVEMENT PT. 2 by cgirl0410.
400 points, ended March 20, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Free Reign by MadPoetyLady.
535 points, ended March 16, 2007, 20 entries
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Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Passionate Erotic Poems by rosepoet.
300 points, ended July 26, 2007, 15 entries
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Silver trophy winner
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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NIICE!!
Sweet, masterful, a total rush!!
I can almost hear the waves crashing..
hmm...brings back some fairly nice memories..
I agree with Riftkin, though, I need a shower now..lol
Very sensuous, and once again, amazing. Soft, that's nice.
Geez Barry, how ya gonna top this one?? I guess I'll just have to wait and see....sighs.....lol!
Much Love, and admiration,
Jin
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this is one great piece of work and I love it very much, now I need to take a shower.
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Love the structure of this piece. nice length too. Thanks for entering.
Good luck in my contest
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Oh this is just so damn sexy. I loved all the imagery in this. It was such a beautiful night. Your pen is very mighty. I'd love to have you write one for me just to see how you'd tease. Good luck in the contest. Hugs~ Cuddles
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Well I have read a lot of great poems and I wanted the finalist pick the winners.....now I'm not saying I want you to read every finalist but if you could read some poems and let me know if you think you should win let me know also thansk
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Well I have read a lot of great poems and I wanted the finalist pick the winners.....now I'm not saying I want you to read every finalist but if you could read some poems and let me know if you think you should win let me know also thansk
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sensually attractive
mother nature and the beach scenery ,brings your story/poem to life,thank you so much for entering our contestPM
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Sensual indeed...and full of lovely imagery. The beach came to life before my eys. Thank you for your entry and best of luck!
Blessings,
Azlyn
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Excellent poems
Really enjoyed the read Bazza,there are some terrific lines there.I too am a Rhymer and I'm your age,and I totally agree with you on your views on free verse.I say each to their own,but please realise how hard it is to get ones thoughts and ideas across and create a poem that rhymes,I'm not talking limmericks here.Anyway, I wish you luck in the contest.Take care Moon Shadow.
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Impressive write. I enjoyed reading this piece.you provided a beautiful and astounding piece of poetry here. I figure this is from a man point of view. So it was more fun to read. Great descriptions. Thanks for entering! Good luck in the contest
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I like this poem the only thing i had a problem with is the way you did the lines that messed me up but i liek it the way you descibed things and hey its the sand what more could a girl ask for
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this is really good i like the orginal structure
thanks for entering
keep writting
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The imagry you provided in this was beautiful and astounding. Thank you so very much for entering my contest I loved reading this!!
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Thanks for the entry!!
I love this.. "For never can heavenly bonds be broken, on this idyllic small island grand,
Where love is mixed with the moon and stars and the golden twilight sand."
angie
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Thank you Angie.
Glad you liked it and thanks for taking the time to say so ... pity it was DQ'd .. I think there are too many little tin Gods running contests because many of the rules don't make sense. For instance putting remarks in the author's notes to prove the rules have been read or not ... if the rules are broken then DQ ... simple
Barry
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Wow, that was really beautiful. I didn't even notice that it rhymed until I was almost finished reading it. The rhyme felt real and unforced which is a big plus! I can't get over how beautiful this poem was. ^_^
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hellangel
Well hellangel, dont believe what all the Free Verse fraternity try to tell you and that rhyming is always forced etc. I have over 130 on my page and ALL rhyme except one and very few are forced . I think one or two only out of many hundreds have said so and then I think they are wrong.Anyway, they are what I call picture poems and more is written on my page. Hope you can read more and maybe put me on your fav. list for promotion is a very hard road on this site due to people clicking on featured work and not leaving a comment,
Warmest regards, and I am glad you enjoyed it,
Bazza (Barry)
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Great entry. I enjoyed reading this piece. Great descriptions. Thanks for entering! Good luck in the contest
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Thank you for your comments and I am gald you enjoyed my poem. I did not want to critisize your poem but did not want to take the easy road and say nothing or just give blind praise. I think you have a talent there waiting to be unlocked and developed and this will come with time and experience. I specialise in only the one way that I write as I don't have the time yet to experiment with numerous genres. (not at age 66)
Personally I don't believe in the trait of making a poem look like a shorthand letter. We don't speak that way so why should we when it is a poem ?? You will notice I descibe what I am feeling from any of my several senses with words, so why make it harder to read and understand by cutting many of them out?
The rhyming is just part of my style that makes me think harder and not take the easy way out. A challenge really.
Your poem showed (to me anyway) , frustration and the resulting impatience.. that's all and is to be expected, so keep that in mind. Don't forget you are new to many of the experiences you are dreaming of so why not leave them until you have experienced them and write about things you have . Millions of subjects. That way you will build your talents and experience much faster. Hope this is of help. I hope you can read some of my other work and enjoy it as much.
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a 29 year old child ??????
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hi dear daddy
I'm still a child; so I'll leave the comments to other adults here.
Love you
Shahrzad
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Thank you Sandy for your smiles, hugs and love and hard earned points by way of applause. Glad you managed to smile ...
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WONDERFUL WRITE
Tastefully sweet my friend. Every women should be so lucky to have a night like this everynight. Gone are those everyday nights. Your imagery was beautiful and your story was woven with love and pleasure. Thank you for sharing this amazing poem. It brought a smile. You knew it would. Take care my friend. Thanks for being there today. I am so blessed with the dearest kindest people on here. I can't thank you enough. I will always be here for you too. Here are your some smiles. A little late but still from my heart. Lover ya, Sandy
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Thanks Petrouska and I am glad you liked it enough to award me your applause as well. It gets harder each time to find a different set of words to describe the most intimate bits but it is fun I suppose trying to come up with something. Thanks a million.
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Thanks Bob for your nice comments and generous applause, but it was fun writing it while the blood was still warm.
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This is a wonderful piece Bazza!! I especially love how you handled the erotic aspects, giving all the intensity without being crude. Very lovingly done.
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Amazing descriptions. You really did excel with this one. Superbly painted pictures of a beautiful scene
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Hi Scarlet, it was a great night and I am so glad that you enjoyed it (the poem I mean) . I really should consider my grammar more. It means a lot to receive such lovely encouragement from such an accomplished artist as yourself. Thanks a million.
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Your descriptions are so vivid as you use great words of imagery to project your minds thoughts into your poetry. You do tell a good story from beginning to the end. Seems like a very nice evening to remember. Hope you have another one like this soon.
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Ah Bazza,this is great,i loved the way you described everything so much from the clouds iun the sky right down to the beads on her face and breasts.Very descriptive,written so well as usual.Excellent my friend.Kenny
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Thank you Head Witch thank you for taking the time to comment, as it is much appreciated. There becomes a problem of taxing the imagination in not making these types of poem sound the same as I find it difficult each time to come up with words and word combinations not used before. Thank goodness there are so many other subjects to choose from Thanks again.
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This is a sweet tasteful piece a little erotic but nothing too out there or blunt. You definately have a knack for this type of thing. The rhyme did not seem forced and the read was smooth. Great job.
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