It was dusk and Lord Almighty was about to retire
after a hard day's work,
when he heard a commotion at the entrance
on investigation
HE came to know that two doors were persisting with the gatekeeper for an audience with HIM.....
The Lord Almighty let them in and queried,
" Come tell me now, what is your problem?"
One of the two doors introduced itself and said,
" O Lord! I have a grouse, You made me a door to the prison,
while you made the other a door to the temple, I don't think you have been fair to me."
The Almighty laughed at the door's problem,
and then faced the second door and asked,
"OK so now you tell me. What is your problem?"
" Well my Lord. I too have the same grouse,
that you have made me a temple door rather than a prison door."
After stating his problem, the temple door kept quiet
Lord Almighty was amused,
" This is indeed strange", he said
" The prison door is keen on becoming a temple door,
while you wish to be a prison door even though you have
the privilege of being a temple door! Why so?"
On hearing Almighty's remarks,
the temple door replied calmly
"O Lord, there is truth within the temple,
and even if it escapes it should not be stopped from doing so
My existence in the temple is not to stop truth from going outside ...As such, my role there is not only irrelevant but also wasteful.
In contrast,
the prison door does have relevance,
for the prisoner represents the devil
and he or she should be refrained from spreading evil everywhere.
For this reason O Lord, I am keen to be the prison door".
Author notes
Written July 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- Doors by CarCrashHumor.
1200 points, ended June 1, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wise words indeed. Very Imaginative. It read like a parable of old
Mariana
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oh wow! this is a really cool way to show an abstract message. I liked this story a lot, and it was written well so that it kept me interested.
thanks for sharing this in my contest
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I always expect the best from you. I love this. What wisdom to write such a poem as this.
Bravo! Good luck in the contest. Shancy.
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A clever poem that asks important questions. Good ideas here!
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...I am keen to be both doors...to share the small light of truth within me, and to hold back the darkness...I love this story...it is so well written...provokes deep thought...thank you for sharing it here...Peace always, Rhonda
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This is quite an interestin write because of the morale within it is like there is good in everything but we canot always see it.Indeed full of wisdom.
Thank you for sharing.
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nice...!! such a simple story told so well...!! worth tellin other people...!!
thanks for sharin!
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The Parable of the two Doors! I haven’t heard one of these since I was a boy. I remember a story in the same vain of three trees in the forest. All wanted to be made into a throne to carry a king but only one tree was chosen, of the other two one became a fishing boat the other ended up as scrap sold to the soldiers to use as a cross. All got there wish just not how they expected…
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Thank you so much for your kind words..I have given a link of the door in the Author comments as desired by you...
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I very much enjoyed this--there was much truth in it. It would be wonderful if we could find a painting of a golden barred door at a temple with flowers climbing on it or something.
best of love and laughter,
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Wonderful!
Dear PDK, I, as you well know, love these stories. Perhaps, with your permission, you would allow me to make them into a little chatbook so I can read them when I want and without a computer! They are wonderful! Jane -
I liked the twist this poem had. It wasn't predictable at all. I think that's what makes it awesome
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o.k. a fine one
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deep and powerful one we have here love the way you've use your words and they flow with ease love the imagery it is very strong just like the message great job !!!!
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powerful message
Hey, I see that you have done it again! This is a powerful message and I hope that everyone else should see it and understand it. I thank you for sharing such wisdom to me....
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Interesting - a parable - or a sermon - it flows - but - reads more like a story rather than poetry - good imagery - dramatic.
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this is such a dramatic write and so moving that i will show it to my paster he will love it keep doing well
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Wow this is an awesome poem! It tells not only the truth, but it teaches those who read it a lesson and it makes you think, unlike many of the poems out there.
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Very creative in your wonderful tale. You are good at story writing. Great job!
keep up the good work
thanks for the read
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What a wonderful tale you have created here........Makes one stop and think of the way things are viewed and the importance placed upon them.......Much luck to you in the contest.
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Food for thought always when i read your work i feel like i am digesting a lot more than sald .terrific i enjoyed this
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wow, makes you think about it. very good.
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Ahh, very well written. I liike it, its a good write -
Boy..made me think of alot of questions I need answered. Wonderful write.
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very well written full of good imagery n questions for god great writing
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hmm... an interesting piece indeed... definetly one to think upon. Good luck in the contest. -(Dark Raven, the bard)
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*blinks*
Caught me by surprise, this piece, the way it made me sit back after reading it and contemplate the truth contained within. It's a lovely selection.. I'll have to pass this one around to my friends.
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