Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Cheap as Sin

Cheap as sin.

Flaming questions
Come hurtling at you
Like meteors,
Millions of years old.
You’re sitting pretty now,
Canary yellow,
Proud but precarious.
You know you never
Made it on your own,
You life sucking minion.

So here we are now
At the crossroads,
Is it all clear now?
The weight of the world
Is crushing you,
You’re going to falter
Because it is forbidden
For you to succeed.

A vacant staring contest
With your carbon copies.
I’m scared,
You scare me,
The void…

Do you want
To suck me dry?
I offer these
Slit wrists…
Does this make you happy?
Bringing home the bacon.
Feast upon my
Subtle depravity.
IM THIS WAY,
BECAUSE ITS WHAT YOU WANTED!!

Each drop of rain
Represents
Every dream of you.
Time warp.
Haunting misconceptions,
The end does NOT
Justify the means.
A one way train
To eternal fun and games.
COME ON! GIVE ME ALL YOU”VE GOT!!
I WANT TO RIDE THE WAVES
OF MY INSANITY!!

So now I’m back
Where I started,
Running through this wall
Of razor sharp blades.
Can you see
The green ooze?
Welcome to my mind,
Tattered and ablaze.
Redemption is always too expensive,
But sins are so cheap,
They’re in high demand.

So maybe I’m a little naïve,
But not so much as to
Start running around
Screaming “I WILL FIND YOU!!”
When you never existed.
Existence is futile!
Love is a cover up,
All your dreams are wanton lies,
Real is fake and fake is real,
Denying it doesn’t make you enlightened.

Come join us on the Walpurgis Night,
All your sins will be rewarded.
Blood oath:
Means your ours forever.
All you wannabe death children,
We will show you what it means
To hate, loathe, lust and long for.
We will show you envy…
You will want to rip out
Your own intestines,
Pierce your own hearts
And cave in your skulls.
We will show you what it really means
To have a tortured soul.

Author notes

I'm Looking Up

Written July 16th, 2006

A contest entry

What did you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 13 of 13

  • Nostalgia
    October 8, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    This is dark, and most assuredly morbid. Yes, It does sound kind of emo. I'm not exactly into this piece. But it is good, thanks for entering!


  • Kappa Pyua
    August 31, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    I'm not sure but this sounds like emo, I'm not really getting this work sorry, also you have until tommorw to correct your Author nots and add your site name and favorite rule thx.


    • shadow-of-the-sun
      August 31, 2007
      Edit | Reply
      what do you mean youre not getting it? :S and i did add my site name and favourite rule. its shadow-of-the-sun and my favourite rule was number 4


  • AshtrayBaby
    August 22, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    This is just like on the border of emo, crossing over to Fuck, Feel My Trauma city. Yeah.

    I liked it, though.


  • the-gifted
    August 16, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    wow. that is deep and good. i like it. it has words not used too often and it goes so perfectly together. very deep. great write.


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    August 4, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Yahuh I'm going to go ahead and add this one to the finalists list No comment really, except that the capitalised letters really do this piece a world of good!

    Bandaid.


  • Aesthete
    July 26, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Well that was positively vicious. I suppose it was a well enough way to spend 58 seconds. A few clichés and inconsistencies were present but not so distasteful as to prevent the venom from seeping into my thoughts. I wouldn’t call this great but it’s definitely in the upper ranks of what I’ve read so far. Also the topic appeals slightly to me in my current circumstance. Lot of intensity here, it’s very believable, but your title seems rather shitty. It doesnt sound good and it seems sin can be quite expensive. Alcohol, drugs, violence, and if your that depraved even sex can be expensive. Sin isnt exactly cheap haha. But I'm just fooling, good job, and thanks for entering


  • Dark Whispers
    May 28, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Very dark, It reminds me of a video game I use to have .
    very good and very vivid.
    My guess is this is MorbidBeauty's poem.
    Great write


    • shadow-of-the-sun
      May 28, 2007
      Edit | Reply
      sorry, im shadow-of-the-sun but thank you for the comment anyway. ummm, question, what videogame did this remind you of?


  • yesterdaysfeelings-
    May 22, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    awesome. extremely original i like the way you write. it doesnt really remind me of anyone else. at all. which to me is good. sooo thanks for entering my contest and goodluck.


  • lust in a grenade
    May 21, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    dark i like it tho thanks for entering good luck


  • Gasp
    April 29, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    please follow the rules


  • nikki5
    August 9, 2006
    Edit | Reply
    i love the part where u say "ride waves of insanity", i think its brillaint, i like the way u write, ur bare and explicit, and thats the way poetry should be

1 - 13 of 13