My mommy doesn't know,
what I do at night.
All tucked in,
but not alright.
That all my fun,
comes from a knife.
And that I'm going,
to Hell tonight.
My mommy doesn't know,
that I play with knives.
but I don't show it off,
like some other girls have tried.
But mommy will go to sleep tonight,
thinking I'm still alive.
But when she wakes up,
she'll find out it was all a lie.
My mommy doesn't know,
so don't tell her, please.
I'm begging you with all my heart,
and I'm begging on my knees.
I'm telling her in this poem,
that she'll read eventually.
But tell her that I helped her,
by ridding her of what she doesn't need.
Shhhhh....
Author notes
option 9--cutting suicide etc
"jungle fever"
Written July 19th, 2006
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A contest entry
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300 points, ended July 26, 2006, 9 entries
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Comments
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this creeped me out, it was so amazing. so dark and so depressing. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Sad, my arm hairs were standing up lol. i love the last stanza, good job and good luc
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i like it! it is a really good poem.
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this is a very sad, depressing write. I can relate to the last five lines:
I'm telling her in this poem,
that she'll read eventually.
But tell her that I helped her,
by ridding her of what she doesn't need.
Shhhhh....
its sad to think that suicide was ever an answer for anyone. great job
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this is amazing. i juss fell in love with your writing
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congrats on the silver, very strong, emtional writing.
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oooo powerfuland sad.. ur wording.. and the way u used your words and the order.. it was perfect.. so sad... i feel for ya.. need help.. i cud rebound! lol
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tight
yo thats deep I love this poem -
beautiful and dark
hold on to any light you can get, im posting one of my favorite poems with this comment, and no, i didnt write it. It's a poem written on depression for anyone who can't tell
Life is precious, Love is kind,
If you seek then you shall find.
If this wish can make it true
All good things shall come to you.
Hide not away, come to the light
NEVER give up without a fight.
The Dark is cold, but the Sun is warm
We shall not let you come to harm.
You're not alone, your friends are Here
Don't give in - defeat the fear.
It's not all-powerful, it CAN be beat
You're too good to deserve defeat.
So stay alert, of the Dark beware
If we can, we will help you - this we swear. -
Wow this is very sad and depressing, I agree, but also craftfully written! As if a midnight secret between young children. If you ever need to talk though I'm here, right?
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thank you for you concern, unfortuanly that poem has almost come true a couple of times
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This is a very sad and depressing poem, i really hope its not true, alot of people feel the same way as you do, but there are better ways of dealing with it than cutting, try talking to someone you trust, or express yourself through poetry, it helps. Please don't cut yourself, it upsets others around you. Try to stay strong. Anyway, this was a really good write. Well done ~*~Dragon~*~
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I'm I know one should never read a poem thinking that this actually reflects the author's own thoughts but this poem has me a little worried about you. If you ever feel like going through with this please seek help ok?
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painfully good
sad write but too often too true... -
Wow i can relate very much so to this poem and how you kept incorperating a single line into it I thik is amazing most poem that incorpwerate the same line ovwer and over again get to be annoying but you made it fit quiet well good job
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thanks very much for you comment, i really appriciate it
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Haha, I like it.
I used to be a cutter too and it brought a smile to my face.
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This was one of the most powerful dark writes I've ever seen. Just...wow. Personally, I don't really know what to say about it. I loved the rhyme and the flow and everything. Great job.
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awe, this is sad. :/. I hope you don't feel this way, like you need to hurt youself. You have such wonderful talent Its, I agree, morbid, but it holds beauty too.
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so beautiful
Oh wow. This is amazingly morbid, and sad, and full of agnst. Your word choice is awesome, and I loved the flow of it. My favorite stanza was the first one and how it rhymed so well. I really enjoyed this piece. Amazing!! Keep up the awesome work! -
I hope this isnt true sis, I want you to be strong, I want you to stay here on this cruel earth with me helping me get through things and helping you get through things. We can make it trough, we can
just promise me that if you do cut that you wont go deep, that you wont bleed and bleed and bleed, I love you like the sister I never had, if anything happened to you, I'd be so lost and screwed. so hang in there, for me okay? im staying strong too, and if I have to be your strength I will, if I have to haul both of us out of this black hole we are cursed to you i will, i just know that i cant do this on my own.. I need your poetry and your everything! I know that sounds so corny
love ya like a sis,
Abused
--Im making a poem for you, right now--
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