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Help me

You walk in
smiles on your faces
All i can think of
broken promises
I smile
doors close
I cry
wipe my face
put the smile on
open doors
small talk
fake laughs
doors close
break down
help me

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Written July 18th, 2006

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  • starlock
    July 19, 2006
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    i like the fakeness of the pretend relationship. i like the feeling that you know that he/she isnt true so why should you bE? i like that you seem to no be able to get out of the relationship, liie you cant stop faking it.
    very good and intersting write.
    keep it up.
    starlockx