Feathers of me dust a silly walk
marks of frog feet and horsetail line
a more forgotten path to God
I wonder if He counts
it against me?
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Go for interpretations. Tell me what I offered 'us'.
(Duette)-- a primarily self-created type usually written:
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Form contains 5-7 lines with numbers of words in this line sequence:
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second - 8 words
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fourth-6-7
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Relativity facts:
The horsetails are vascular plants, comprising 15 species of plants in the genus Equisetum.
They have resemblances of the tail of the horse, and have many other properties that even contribute to the composition of "coal".
Written July 18th, 2006
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how sweet and unique your response. Thank you
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I will sit and relax now, take deep
breaths and read;
and slowly by word,
line and verse
I will be immersed
into the sunlit world
of CookieZeal.
I will find peace there
for peace falls from her soul,
her rich poems.
Those
are to me like pink clouds are to a sunset
I will take all I can get
from CookieZeal
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Creator never holds anything against us, the path has many different side trails, but eventually they all lead back to the intended goal, and the journey is really what its all about, so walk sideways longways upwards or backwards, just keep walking eh!
Much Love and Blessings
angelsvoice63
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great i had to read it a few times because i thought it read fathers of and it made no sence so i realy should keep my glasses on keep doing well to dust your way down the poetic way of life
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a confusing poem but i liked it. it sounded nice and had a good rythme even without a rhyme. i thought it was a poem about a horse at first. lol
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really really nice write..... i liked this alot.....
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Your two understandings certainly make a difference to the content. I think you're right on both accounts. As I was replying to another who replied, I think the dust is certainly biblical, as it is by the faith we shirk what holds our feet where Christ is concerned. Just something about dust and feathers, which...somehow might be an astringent thought to the title.
You're terrific. I like what you said, and you brought me closer to the Duette content of style which I composed. Thank you...thank you doll.
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You got the content I intended. I'm sure that it's partially in my walk with Christ that makes it theological, but fragile need to know if out-of-faith detours are taking me away from something I might have missed. Thanks sooooooo much, Rof. Great apres to this Duette form.
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Very clever write. However, I do question my two understandings. I got a sense, initally, of you deciding to come back, so to speak, by dusting off an old path, something of your native past, heritage which is founded along stable lines and knowledge of God, and wondering now if your time away should be counted against you. Or a second thought, you're shaking the dust off your feet, shedding feathers, to cover a path of past heritage and old Knowledge and wondering if this action will be held against you. If I'm anywhere close, where I'm confused is in the dusting; either dusting off or adding dust to cover up.
Anyway, this was a fun exercise for my brain. Love the picture play on words. Well done.
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Nope, as long as you are with him in the end. A totally original take here.
Beautifully conceptualised, not a word out of place and the form: hmmm. Theological?
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this was good but didn't understand it . but it was fun to read. And that all that count thanks for shareing
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Is your analogy a duck? {possibly}
too vague for my small imagination Di.
Tamara
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