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give me one more moment to live...

Give me one more moment to live,

so I could ride
butterfly's erratic flight...

so i could dance
with rain snapping on the ground...


Give me one more moment to live,

so I could see
colors of rainbow...

so I could laugh
with blithe zephyr...


Give me one more moment to live,

so I could smile
with beautiful flowers...


SO I could sing
with bird kike...


Give me one more moment to live,

so I could say
thanks to all, thanks to you Oh lord!

so I could lie
on my lovers lap and say, "I love you..."



Give me one more moment to live,

so I could be blessed with
my lover's kiss...

so I could live
another life...


(written when i was about to commit suicide, but then i thought to write poem and after writing this poem i wished to live...)

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Written July 18th, 2006

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  • baawri
    September 29, 2006
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    awesome

    Its sounds absolutely awkward why a multi-facet personality like you wanted to do cuicide..what may be the reason each moment has its own gift of pleasures and pain instore for us..reading your works after a long time.But cherishing them as usual.I would like to say hope had i hod one more momentto go through it once more..really the poem is brilliant.whenever you feel sad just read your works thats an advice from a poet friend of yours who has been doing that for the last three years continuously to come out of depression and keep in mind that any action taken admist the flood of emotions is often vice seldom wise.


  • starlock
    August 26, 2006
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    wow with is amazing, i like the line 'so I could live
    another life...' its a very powerful thought, the wish that what would we do wiht a new life, would we end up in the same possition? i love this poem and the thoughts congured it like imagges, the last images before death takes you to the other side. brilliant work, hope to see more.
    starlockx


  • Sitara
    August 23, 2006
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    so i could dance in a butterflies
    erratic flight

    so i could dance with rain
    tapping on the ground

    so i could see
    the colours of the rainbows


    with the blithe zephyr


  • Martin M Clark
    July 26, 2006
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    Well I'm sure glad you didn't off yourself. Stick around, it gets better!


  • vibiesh
    July 25, 2006
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    Sing your songs mirthfully
    So we can wander our mind
    To the supreme

  • Sitara
    July 22, 2006
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    hi Abhi ,Firstly I dont like your sad poems,i am trying to look through the pain but cant,well the words are very nice ,just structure it better.Its a good one really ,talk to you soon


  • Princess-nee
    July 22, 2006
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    Hi abhimanyu....
    ..Thank God you wished to live instead of suiciding...
    ..life is cruel sometimes,i know..but with optimism..everything will be okay,glad that after writing this poem you have got some confidence and hope...be like that always..
    ..the poem is dark but full of hope...
    - ...


  • unchained fears
    July 18, 2006
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    you did a good job on this
    keep it up
    *flying*

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