Picture this...
On my knees, between your thighs
Listening to your moans and sighs
Tongue is flicking all around
Stroking base, swirling crown
Hands are groping, grasping
In pleasure, you are gasping
Tight and tense, hips buck and rock
Feel me baby, suck your cock
I know you like it, you start to glisten
Aroused by my lapping friction
Tension building, moans get loud
Your throbbing heat, I enshroud
Deeper, faster, I take in more
Your body, jolted, to the core
I feel it near, it's what I seek
To make you cum, leave you weak
Tense up tight, 'bout to explode
Grunting, gasping, shoot your load
Grab my head, again you groan
I swallow deep, your raging bone
Liquid pearls soothe and coat
As your cum floods my throat
A wicked smile 'cross my lips
Standing up, release your hips
Left there, all nice and slick
All because I blew your...
Mind!!!
Author notes
I DID start with *picture this*...
G
Written July 18th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Lots of options come see !!!!! by Darc Soul.
300 points, ended September 24, 2006, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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A JUICY GOLD TROPHY WINNER, INDEED!
If I wasn't seeing how long and for how many days that I can stroke my cock without going over the edge - I would hav cummmmmmm to this fine piece - in a heartbeat and in very few strokes, Baby! You certainly are a pro when it comes to giving head! What else are you good at in bet. my sweet and sensual friend?
Here come three fellows who stroked away to this piece and CAME as they couldn't control themselves but were too embarassed to tell you or to give you the standing O that you deserved!
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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Sweet Storm this is awesome love, this is just 'mind' blowing alright ... I love it
thanks for the link
and I know a few guys that would love me to do this for them
Riftkin -
Sweetness
Very very very hot
all my applauses spent
let me return lots
since my mind bent.
Smoosh
Janet -
Thank you for the comment, appreciate it.
Storm -
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lol...wow...that was awesome
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LOL, thank you for the comments, much appreciated.
Storm -
This Blew My Mind!
This blew Mind in the first few sentences...
then when You got to the c word...
I covered my Mouth
Congratulations on your win!!
What a ride-(no pun intended)
Great job on this and Thank You for sharing
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thanks for the comment, glad you enjoyed it. Appreciate it.
Storm -
LOL, everyone expects something else to come at the end. Thank you for the comments and compliments.
Storm -
OMG I really like this poem especially like the last part. It was sort of funny but at the same time it was really intense. I love all your erotica poems since you write in a way that you feel like you're the one experiencing all of this passion and lust. Keep writing. Emily
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LMAO, depending on the type of work, you may be better off thinking of the ice. Though I am told the accidental cold water works much quicker and more efficiently. Thanks for the smiles, Glad you enjoyed it.
Storm -
This is er, ah, exciting, you have left me with two choices, either"accidentally" pour cold water down the front of my pants, or just sit here and think of ice, until the "feeling" subsides. Great write, though a wrning label for those of us at work should be included
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LOL, thank you hun. Get through in one sitting, huh? LOL, glad you enjoyed it. Appreciate your words.
Storm -
Painful
That was too sexy and too perfect. I myself was not looking for the rhyme at the end, I was just hoping to get through it in one sitting. WOW, WOW, WOW!! I'll have give you "a standing ovation" on this one. I just love your writes! Take care and "keep it up" haha. -
Thanks Jeannie, appreciate your comments
Storm -
Thanks for the comment,appreciate it.
Storm -
Yummy. Great writing as usual. Very hot and sexy. Good luck i the contest.
Jeannie D Hunter
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Loved this poem.
Liked the way you kept the stanzas to two lines it gives it the urgency that a good BJ has
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Thanks for the comments,appreciated.
I am sure a few were waiting for that rhyme.
Storm -
lol this was great, descriptive and the ending unexpected and funny. how many guys were waiting for the rhyme to be there?
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LOL, I think just about everyone was expecting that D word. My twisted mind.
Thanks for the comments hun. Nice to see you on here a bit. Missed you.
Storm -
The ending just took me away. lol I was expecting the d word but was taken aback by mind. lol Loved it as usual. Great work, Storm and good luck in the contest.
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LOL thanks for the comments. I appreciate it.
Storm -
Good Luck
LOL, this was great. I only laugh because I am female so it doesn't turn me on in the slightest! I bet any male who reads this though it would blow their minds!! I reckon you probly have made a lot of guy readers a little hot under the collar with this one!!! Well done. The flow was great and you did well to set the scene. Good luck to you in this contest.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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Thanks for the comments, I appreciate it.
Storm -
Outstanding!!! Powerful language and imagery...and a cute ending. Bravo! Larkin
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Thanks Val, glad you enjoyed this. Something for your mind while you're laid up in bed. Hope you're doing good, glad to see you getting on here once in a while. Miss you sweetie.
Autumn -
OMG Autumn! Wow! Okay, I need out of this dang bed, and to get on with life or something here. That was amazingly done. So vivid with the images. Wow again.
Nice job Sis.
~Val -
Umm, something wrong there Jay? Having a little (or maybe not so little) problem? lol
Glad you enjoyed, thanks for the comments, I appreciate them
Storm -
Holy frick, chick!!! Damn, I get off work at 5!
I read your above comment, that is one hell of a fantasy Storm. Sure in the hell got me going. I am sure glad I work in a private office right now. I wouldn't be able to walk anywhere. Very nice images, and, well, yea, you know. Good luck there.
-Jay -
The ending was intentionally left like that. It was left to have readers think I would rhyme slick out with blowing your dick. But by my comment, and the start of the poem, I did say picture this, my meaning, it is all a fantasy or a dream. Therefore, it isn't the actual act of ablow job, but the fantasy of one instead.
Thanks for the comment, glad you enjoyed.
Storm -
WOW! I love this. The ending was kinda off but that's ok. I love the imagery. I love the 'I'll make you cum to leave you weak' part. Very cool!
Good luck in contest!
Missy
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