Softly the breeze sways
across the meadows
As petals dance in slow ecstasy
almost like a caress
As their nodding heads
dip and bow
in perfect time
As nature's ballroom
hosts
the dance of the wildflowers~
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Written April 2nd, 2003
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you are a talented writer
Beautiful -
OoooOHHH! Its so beautiful. I like the way you make it sound fairly complicated, although it is a fairly simple subject. How.pretty.
I love flowers and watching them. It sounds weird, but I do. Expecially the little blue ones(I can't remember right now what they are called!). -
Wow, I loved the picture! The background on u're author page is cute, too, btw!
This poem was so beautifully written, I loved natures ballroom line, so cute!
luv
bebe -
Susan this is a beautiful write. love that picture. I love water falls.
Red -
Beautiful
Frist, thanks for the review of my poem. I appreciate it.
Your poem is beautiful, it reminds me of summer days when I sat on the steps of our cabin and looked out over the fields at the beautiful scenery. I could even feel the warm breeze on my face. You use powerful words that evoke beauty and serenity. I also love the picture you used to illustrate the poem. Thank you for sharing!
~Mystikal~ -
Excellent! Lovely poem!
I really loved the image of the ballroom with the dancing wildflowers, Sis! Beautifully written...this is what spring's all about!!!
Love Ya!
Maureen
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Wonderful
This was a sweet and endearing write. I LOVED IT!!! made me smile and wish that the freezing rain here in ontario, canada would stop and that it would be pretty here again. Made me desperately want to be a my cottage going on a long hike throught the forest, catching glimpses of the beauty that would be there. Thank you for sharing this, and making my day.
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Ahhhh nature!
That sweet picture of the heart!
This finds a touch within my heart!
I did enjoy this!
Keep penning on my friend!
Bill -
Short, sweet, with beauty abounds. Reminds me of a walk through a meadow on a perfect Spring day. I could see it all...
I have new poems up, I'd love your feedback
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WOW this is sooo goodddddddd. I love the ballroom dancing imagery and the way they are dancing. Your use of language is awesome.
You have a lot of talent for writing and I think that you will succeed in this area. :-D super job!!! :-D love peeling -
Oh you so make me want to see green grass and flowers
Still darn snow on the ground here in Maine
ARRRGG lol...This is so pretty! makes you want to just go
sit amougst the dandelions..
Me is going too! i swear when they finally arrive
Beautiful write Hon* Love and HuGs to You! Susan ~~Mina
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ohhhhhh, pretty i loved how you ended it the ballroom, and the dance of the wildflowers i love this a lot and i agree with wmike145 and scarstoheal, it's a nice, relaxing poem
kayla* -
Wow. Susan, that was beautiful! And I agree with wmike145. It's relaxing. Keep it up!!!
-Jey -
beatiful...
it was peaceful and relaxing -
Ahhh Sis.. such a joy to read.
simple yet perfect.. short but saying so much.. wish we could go for a walk right now.. and chat and catch the breeze.
~GILL~xx -
Beautiful Susan. I have seen this picture before but with your words to enhance it now it's even lovlier to look at.
~Von~
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Excellent
A beautiful piece Susan ... Soft, gentle serene.
Lovely images you have given us all.
Take every care Dear Friend,
Sammy -
Ah these are the step that take the to a more enchanting place, in the mind -tj-
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Oh Susan, this is beyond beautiful I love the picture
Love you,
Karen
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What a beautiful piece. I can picture the whole setting prepared for just such a dance, it's an enchanting piece *S* Thanks for sharing.
-Angel aka WoundedAngel. -
I can almost smell the beauty
this piece is wonderful
short and sweet - you did a great job
keep it up*
.thanx for sharing.
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sheshe143
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