There is no harmony between the spirit and the flesh
Our hearts dance without rhythm at the sound of the drum
Tortured as a slave
My eyes absorbed with great vision
As I adapted and learned how to write
I touched life beyond its limit
I brought joy and happiness to many
I wiped out fears and tears
Still I continue to struggle
But I have great will and determination
Whether I faint while searching
I will never surrender for I believe
Just like my great grand father under the cold earth
I will die fighting to support a dream
A dream of one day seeing life pure white
If there's a way I could sell my soul
Not for a dollar or a bag of coins-
Just at the cost of saving lives-
My heart would forever smile
But the truth forever remains
Like sugar that attracts ants
We are vulnerable to anything sweet
A brother is slain,
Not by a sword, or a gun
but by our words, our greed's
It is the Hitler in me
The Caesar's in you
That turn us all into a Lucifer
But one thing forever stays true
Within the seed of a good deed
Thousand of souls yearly grow
And a heart faithfully harvests
Author notes
Transatlanticism
A contest entry
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What did you think
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You did a great job! Human rights is so important and you paint that picture well. You expressed yourself beautifully. I loved how this flowed, and your word choice is great. Thanks for entering my contest.
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wow
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wow, what a deep and inspiring poem, i love it. its as sad as it is thought provoking and hope filled, for there is hope if any one person could see life like this. really, very good.
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Indeed, an inspirational piece. A lot of emotion and imagery in this. I liked the hope you expressed. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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I really enjoyed this. You strive for beauty and good in the world and still have an understanding of the darkness in human nature. This piece is masterfully written. I found myself reading it again and again. It touched me. Great job and good luck in my contest.
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The evil that resides in us all is what causes all the pain in the world. I also enjoyed the unique form that your poem was written in. The curve gently carried me along as I read. Nicely penned. Thanks for entering my contest.
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I like the spacing you did on those two parts and how this was written and how it talks about good deeds along with how the narrator has helped so many people.
Good luck.
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Awesome!
This poem was beautiful and in my opinion the best one I have read from you so far... I don't know what else to say this should be on your author's page.
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This is a beautiful piece, and I love how you used the format of the poem to accentuate the words. Good write.
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Awesome.
Extremely well written , very powerful, and so much passion, very good. Thank you for entering in my contest, you have a gorgeous peice laid out before me and i do not know what to say, it has brought hope to my heart, and as well hopefully others. Death is never a good thing, and maybe with a little bit of love and affection, we could save lives, for the cause of caring. But some, for them it is too late, their words were unheard, and it is such a sad thing too, but for others, the best is just begenning. It only takes one voice to rise the orchestra, and it only takes one voice to start to sing, so, with this peice of writing, i am sure that if enough want to, then you can bring the whole world to sing. Thank you so much for such a fantastic write, and thank you so much for entering into my contest. This is defiently very creative, and I can feel so much desperation, and hope, the light does shine on this idea, and someday it will all come up to be shared and shown and gifted by others, i am sure. I love how you formatted it as well, it gives the poem a better feel. Thank you so much, and best of luck...Hopefully you do keep writing. -
Awesome!! Brava!!
The wisdom and truth in this amazing piece are pure poetry absolutely amazing!! Surely, this wonderful piece would stir anyone away from apathie's plate
Metaphors carefully placed bringing a distinct flare Well done poet!!
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors
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This is a very interesting peice, I must say. It deffinatly grabs your attention with its powerful words and message. I love how you started out the peice with such strength and conviction, and with thesepowerfull lines which are by far my favorite in the entier peice:
"There is no harmony between the spirit and the flesh
Our hearts dance without rhythm at the sound of the drum"
Wow this all blew me away. Amazing write and good luck in tne contest!
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like the form
you have used here. It adds flow and rhythm to the poem . good luck in the contest
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A brother is slain,
Not by a sword, or a gun
but by our words, our greed's
It is the Hitler in me
The Caesar's in you
That turn us all into a Lucifer
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this is deep kinda thought provking... I was confused not sure of what you were actually stating...somewhere in a few lines completly made me unsure...anyways thanks for entering my contest...This is good...This is aiight kinda boring but its okay...but very creative though that you found my picture to be the shadow of this imagery...
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Hiya this poem is awesome!
I was reading all the poems of the people who have entered,
befoe I was going to.. but as I said in another Comment to a different contestent 'I am not sour If I should'. You are a fab writter and I think you will go a long way, you must have been writting for years!
Good Luck in the contest.
XxJellyBeanxX AKA XxSarahxX
God Bless You And All You Care For!
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It is also my passion, one of my very few passions, as well as the one I love. I liked the layout of this piece
like this
and continuing
on the progress
untill you had to
come back here
once more.
Great write. Good luck! -
ur a finalist!
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Wow this is AWESOME ~ I love the layout and how you flowed it this way and that~ then bring us right in ~ and you did it with the poetry as well~ NICE job~ Very creative! good luck in the contest!
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You've got the top three bad guys here!
Hitler, Caesar & Lucifer
I enjoyed the bowed edge you gave to this piece - it led the path while the story evolved.
Thanks for your entry & Good Luck in my contest!
Tang
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wow, this is great! i love the word choice, but i especially love the style. it's exactly what i wanted when i started this contest.
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hi i thought this was good i liked what you wrote about and the style you wrote it in also liked the imagery well done and good luck
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a good poem though the end verse i noticed needs some attention. i thank you kindly for entering your poetic piece and good luck to you in this contest - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Should "slain-ed," just be "slain?" The powerful voice is fueled with an array of emotions, from strength to pain and the belief in surviving. Well done for all of that.
thanks for entering.
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Incredibly powerful and well written. This one impacts the soul. Excellent imagery and emotion here. I was captivated by this, it really got the mind moving. Bravo!
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I donno how tough it is, writing a shape poem as i have never written a single 1. but the fact is this work of urs really touches my heart and thats important to me.. it was fabulous
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excellent
Hey I thought it was cool how you made your poem into a shape. I know other people already commented on that.. but anyway...
I also like the thing about the heart harvesting... An entire poem could be written on just that topic. *clapclapclap* -
I liked the style of this poem. Very unique. I liked the curve. I can see why it got a lot of applauds! great job and good luck w/everything!
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Hey.
This was a good write.
I liked the style. The wavy thing happining.
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MOST EXCELLENT
From a poet to another poet... BRAVO my friend... an excellent piece indeed. -
very strong and powerful poem! i love how you layed it out.. im still trying to figure that out
and just like the Will Iam guy my favorites lines were
It is the Hitler in me
The Caesar's in you
That turn us all into a Lucifer
awesome! amazing!
Abused
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"It is the Hitler in me
The Caesar's in you
That turn us all into a Lucifer
But one thing forever stays true
Within the seed of a good deed
Thousand of souls yearly grow
And a heart faithfully harvests"
Incredible write...!!!
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"There is no harmony between the spirit and the flesh"
This is TRUTH from the beginning of time as we know it. There is always going to be an internal war waged between the two.
"But I have great will and determination
Whether I faint while searching
I will never surrender for I believe
Just like my great grand father under the cold earth
I will die fighting to support a dream..."
I relate so heavily to these powerful sentiments. There is courage woven throughout this exquisite poem. I feel the warrior in your pen.
"It is the Hitler in me
The Caesar's in you
That turn us all into a Lucifer
But one thing forever stays true
Within the seed of a good deed
Thousand of souls yearly grow
And a heart faithfully harvests"
These words ring true from times past to the present. Thank God for the; "seed of a good deed".
*BRILLIANT WORK POET!
Thank you ever so much for gracing my challenge with this poem. I wish you the best in this contest, and all you choose to pursue in life.
Much LOVE & Many Blessings ♥
Renee
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wow, this is such a deep piece and it has a lot of strong lines that structures it so well. You did a wonderful job. Creative and clever idea. Thanks for sharing
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Absolutely beautiful.
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very strong poem. It's one of those where you think you know what it's about but then you read furthur and it' not what you expected afterall. I like the way you presented it as well, in a original layout that made it interesting to look at as well. I've been meaning to read this for a while now after seeing it in the featured box for a couple of days. This is a truely inspirational right. Well done.
Kal xx -
Excellant
There aren't enough superlatives for this one. -
Well, this one is certainly well-ounded. Wonderful to read, interesting to see...you've done a great job with this, and the originality of it startles me.
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Nice flowing poem and excllent inspirational piece to read.
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Damn, you put some thought and images into this one, didn't you? I am grinning right now because I enjoyed this so much. Wow, I gotta read this again... very nice. Very nice, indeed.
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This... I just love it. I'm left speechless. Keep up the killer work
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nice creative write.. i like it alot... i love how u use the word harvest to end the poem.. or wats that word.. lol.. conclude!! lol =]
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Great write. very expressive, I definitely enjoyed reading this. Amazing job, keep up the awesome work.
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Gripping
I still cannot write free verse(it was open verse when I started trying), A long time ago. I can enjoy and appreciate it though, the many points made are one after another. This is done so that it flows gently, then it forces a point, and flows again. Good luck. jono
PS sorry I have no Applauds left.
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nice one
hey i really enjoy ur writing.....especially the format was much for fascinating
a good poem.......juz go on & kep sharing eith us so that we could have some fun to read
take care & have a nice time........be bindaas
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Great write!
This is a great piece! So much truth and a truth that many choose not to see. I hope that when my children are grown they will show this wisdom and pass it too their children so that their lives will hold a better peace than we have today. Absolutely wonderful! Thank you for sharing your wisdom!
Shannon -
I do love this piece. There is much wisdom and truth here. It is only one heart at a time, standing courageously for peace and truth, that can usher in "harmony between spirit and the flesh."
Best of luck in the contest my new friend!
- joanne
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Very strong and dynamic piece on so many levels. Great work.
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this was a beautiful piece.
almost philosophical. almost like the idea that the victim is the cause for the murderer's motive. we can cause our own deaths whether it be by greed or lust..
((one thing.. just so its fixed. i dont know if you care or not.. but it's 'caesar'.. a lot of people miss the a. im just trying to be helpful so it looks all professional and whatnot!
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excellent write. loved it.
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Like sugar that attracts ants
We are vulnerable to anything sweet
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I loved it too. the lay out was great and it was easy to read .good luck in the contest
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Beautifully written with so many hidden truths as well as the obivious ones. No matter the color, we all have the same courage in our hearts.
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i really enjoyed this poem. and i really like the Cesar's line because i love the greek monarch and it was a perfect comparison. very good poem
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I loved this poem!!! I am a total history and English freak so I loved the lines
"It is the Hitler in me
The Cesar's in you"
I thought that was a great comparison and truely amazing poem, thank you so much for sharing it here on AP -
To be honest I am only just learning to understand free verse, I am reading a lot in order to educate me, so bear with me. Some I dont even finish reading, this was an exception, I enjoyed it. thank you and good luck with the contest J x
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I love this from beginning to end, captivating and very strong. Well done.
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That was great!!!! bravo!!!
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so nice
that was great
and keep on doing with what your doing
many give up to fast but your gonna last
i loved you work
it seemed so real to me and it was a nice read
so don't stop writing keep going on
and oh I think you hadan amazing title for it
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great title.
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Very cool, great read. Keep writing
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Touching and beautiful peace. Awesome job- I loved reading this ^^ Thanks for sharing this piece! Keep up the great work
~erika -
flipeen amazing
~Madi
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This is very interesting and carries a powerful message. I like the Caesar and Hitler comparison. Thanks for the read. I really enjoyed it.
Melanie -
Wow this is such a wonderful write! So powerful and full of meaning and purpose! This is a perfect picture of courage and hope! I love your words and your expression! Much applause! I shall bookmark this one!
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excellent
This piece had a lot of thought put into it to express wha t I see as a very personal yet very public rationalization. A philosiph that is worthy of words in this day where everything has to be soooo P.C. It's moving and gracious in a subject that it is nearly impossible to be gracious, yet get your pint across. no body wants to here this side but hurray!!!! this is excellent! -
this is a great write, and the last part is so true, words slay people more often than weapons do. and the comparison of hitler and ceasar to your ownself, is well done, its a very humble attitude, good job, I enjoyed this!
~Shirley -
great work,
and yes keep on with your dreams.
without them we have nothing.
you insprie.
thank you
candy -
wow! this is an amazing write!! Very strong, written with passion and intensity!
Kiran -
agree... interesting and good write... good choice of words... and clarity of expression
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Yes, very interesting and artistic!
It was quite creative and kept me wanting to read more and more of it because it does paint a picture, indeed .
A part that really stood out to me was,
' But the truth forever remains
Like sugar that attracts ants
We are vulnerable to anything sweet'
It's just a great thing to compare yourself to. I don't know, I just really liked that part..along with the rest of the piece!
Incredible and please do keep it up!
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Oh wow, thi sis very good poem. Very artistic and brings image to your minds. I think you have a very unique talent of using the past to make it feel courageous. I like this poem it is very good. It keep speople wanting to read mroe and learn more of what is going on. Good work of literature. Keep up the good work.
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This was very powerful and very moving.I could feel pride building up in me.This is one of the best poems I have read here.The first time I have seen your work and I am truly impressed.
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This was beautiful, i loved it. Very strong it includes very good metaphors. And i see your a Haitian So am i ,keep writing keep up the good job. Becasue i heard we are very good words ( well haitians are and if your not one sorry.
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Wow! There is a lot of meaning in this piece! I really enjoyed it! Thanks for sharing.
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This is an interesting piece.
We can all be like Lucifer and fall astray for anthing sweet, and hope that one day we can meet our dead ancestors no matter how goood or bad we are.
Beautiful. ^.^
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