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Loving the day, Missing the Night

lets turn this around and look it in the eye
the only time i would ever try to make myself
happy.
I'd colour you with jealousy
but sickening disgust could be a better description
of the look upon your face
could i really ever  hurt you?
the changes in my moods can tell
that your not going to take this well
and I'm only that far away
of a new day.

and do i really want to give away
the life I've always wanted
for the life i just can't take
always missing one more beat
always taking one less step
towards the colours of eternity
the only life that's made for me.

happiness provokes me
but comes with a cost
for times i find it pleasing
for a calming loss
but when my mind unbuttons
and all of me is shown
I'll crawl back in my corner
cause he will never know

just how far my insanity goes.

and do i really want to give away
the life Ive always wanted
for the life i just cant take
always missing one more beat
always taking one less step
toward the colours of eternity
the only life that's made for me.

sometimes death comes
unexpected
and before you even know it
your whole life is thrown away

Author notes

first off: pink floyd, my chemical romance, billy idol, billy joel, phil collins, from first to last. interesting combinations, right?


mm. well its a song, obviously. about a decision i have to make. i guess the decision is written right in the song, and if you need help...ask.
Written July 17th, 2006

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  • Myth Of Twilight
    October 1, 2006
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    hay join my contest im about to start it hope to see ya thare


  • Glass Heart
    September 10, 2006
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    Great job. I loved the wording and just the whole thing. I loved it. Nifty write.


  • the walls have ears
    July 26, 2006
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    Great write, I really like thes two lines "the changes in my moods can tell that your not going to take this well" those lines flow really well and theyu have great meaning.


  • Myth Of Twilight
    July 17, 2006
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    deep and stong amasing write i loved it fantasick job and i understand you hear grat job once agean and i hope to start readig more ok laters