Astride a stump of ebony
sparks a glow from bended knee
with fragile wings on air so still
a soul ignites and flies at will
Flicker, flutter little flame
swirl then twirl and seek your fame
In sequined satin slippers blue
and slinky gown of glowing white
your graceful gloves in radiant red
arise at will o’re dainty head
Flicker, flutter with the breeze
dance your dance seductively
You swivel then you pivot
pirouetting perfectly
lost in cadence on the night
tiny dancer of candlelight
Flicker, flutter bow with grace
fly with wings of smoky lace
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A contest entry
- Masterpieces From Writer's Block by SoS.
300 points, ended December 9, 2006, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - CANDLEMAS by Vera Rich.
300 points, ended February 10, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This a very nice piece of work Sandi, a little different from the usual, which is what I enjoy. I particuarly like the couplet after each stanza, it kind of breaks the whole thing up. The only thing that bothers me is the "ebony" reference, black candles always put me in mind of black mass, but that's just me. Well done and good luck in the contest. Val
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Interesting and unusual
I love the many ways that you have described a lighted candle and the flame. The whole poem is unique and I love to find poems like that, at least ones that don't go over the top and this one is beautifully written, it's interesting on the page and it is most tasteful. Tasty in fact! There are several lines in this poem that are especially delightful and the last two lines personify that unique flicker of delight. I enjoyed it. Best regards, Carole Dwinell. -
Acknowledgement, reminder on bonus points etc
Thank you for entering. I regret the delay in starting to process the entries; however, when I was about to open them on Candlemas morning, I discovered that the "system" had listed the competition as closing on 6 February - 4 days later. So, in case anyone was working to this later deadline, I let the competition run on. Naturally, I did not look at the page again until this morning (6 February) - and then I found the closing date had reverted to 2 February as I had originally intended it to be. (I do NOT understand how this happened - however, the finer points of the internet remain a mystery to me).
I am now acknowledging entries, and - in view of the delay, will download them for judging so that I shall not have to look at your page again before I have reached my decision. (Do not worry - I shall delete them as soon as I have finished the judging)
So,this means that the period for critiquing other entries can begin as from now, and run until Friday (9 February) mid-day London time.
If you wish to earn bonus points for critiquing, please critique at least three entries by other people. Critiques should be written in good English, avoiding text-speak, should be at least 50 words long, and be MEANINGFUL.
Please note that critiques dated before the competition closed will not, repeat NOT, count towards bonus points.
Also that to be eligible for bonus points you MUST leave your poem in the competition until the FINAL report on it is sent to you as an IM. Withdrawing it prematurely could mean that other competitors who have critiqued it could lose THEIR chances of a bonus.
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Clever and very imaginative. Good job.
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Yep...an old scow with a sunken chest.
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awwwwwwww.... gee... boy is my face red. 'course you were referring to the candle 'stump'. It's a common phrase, I don't know how I missed it. I'm so sorry. I'm going to my room now.
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Wonderfull. This is just full to the brim with color, motion and music. You have so adeptly assaulted my senses with this poem. I love it! And how did you know that ebony is a tree?
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