I wish I could let go,
But he won't let me.
I try to control how I need him,
But I can't.
I feel as if my lungs are collapsing when I am with him,
but my heart aches when I am without him.
Please lord take him from me!
but wait... No lord bring him back to me!
I look into his ocean blue eyes and i wonder why,
who, where, what... What i am doing?
I kiss his lips continually,
But similar to weed they make me do things I don't want to do.
I am in,
But I can't get out.
I Wish I could let go,
But he won't let me.
Author notes
Everyone has that one Love in their life that they can't live without this women doesn't know if it is good or bad. Thank you for reading.
Written July 16th, 2006
A contest entry
- One Thing by RevHead.
300 points, ended July 22, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - * * * loving you forever ? * * * by The Hardest Goodbye.
450 points, ended December 28, 2007, 16 entries
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very good job on this one, it was deep and soulful and emotional.
good luck in my contest!
xo
kandy -
Great job! I loved the way you described the confusion. Take me away, no put me back! I loved it. It just had this emtion evoked in the poem that many people don't understand. Great poem, nonetheless.
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That was deep, beautiful, I mean that was everything. It showed how your kinda afraid to love, but you're willing to take a risk to be hurt. I feel that poem 100%. God Bless you in this contest.
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great write! i really liked it because I can definitely relate. nothing here to critique.
keep up the good work!
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hey, I really like this poem, i can relate a lot!
thankyou for entering my contest, and good luck! NMNM
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