Laying quiet, cold and numb;
Oozing blood drips far away.
Breathless tears remain as stale,
while wasted wails are left to stay.
Sharpened cut to twinge the heart;
Carve and cleave, dissect an arm.
Sickly moans and morbid squeals:
yelp to screeches; hellish harm.
Grind the stomach, chop the head;
Bellow deep beneath the cry.
Gruesome steam engulfs the lungs;
Slow but stagnant, time to die.
the terror happens every day --
atrocious murders by a blade.
And with each ruthless brutal death,
six chicken nuggets have been made
Author notes
Who saw that coming!?!?
OPTION 5
A contest entry
- [[.Courtesy of a Raven's Blood.]] by Soten-Jaganshi.
1600 points, ended October 17, 2008, 58 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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May I state that I love this? And while I didn't expect it, I've seen something similar. Or rather heard. Two of my friends are Veggies, and they enjoy informing us how are food is made during lunch v.v Great job here and good luck!
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thanx for entering
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Hmmm... I'll start by saying that, no, I didn't see that coming at all. My guess is that you're a vegan/vegetarian... Correct me if I'm wrong, but your poem seemed to speak of the butchery of animals for food. Not really what I was looking for here, but it wasn't terrible. Thanks for entering, and good luck.
Laura
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well its good....and thats all i really have to say about that....um...... thank you for entering!!!!!-GOREgous Gore
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haha. amazing detail and the ending was fabulous.
welcome to finalist.
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This was odd...it was really good but odd...the six chicken nuggets was not were I thought you were going with this piece! But this is a really good pice...
Great write... Best of Luck in the Contest!
With Words Of Love and Hope,
Musyk
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Fantastic!
That was excellent. I was drawn into the poem from start to finish, it was diffrent! I at first thought you were speaking about human death but then you quickly change and go on to explain your talking about animal cruelty aswell! This i appluad as me and many of my friends are against it.
Anyway good work
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Great write !
Now this was spectacular
Loved it very much
good use of words
Much love Millie
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ey is moor mercifuuul to my chikens. I alwaas chok my chiken furst. itz a lot mor fun enyway
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I loved the twist this poem took, it made me think it was so angry and bitter, but that end made me kind of laugh in astonishment. Loved the poem, almost laughed til my sides simply burst. Hope you do well in this contest, you deserve a gold for this outrageous poem.
Tiphanie -
How brilliant is that! I adore the idea in this one. The way you put it forward abd expressed it was amazing too
I was sitting there thinking "Another cutting poem" but you really suprised me with the end, it was brilliant
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aww its so cute u feel for the chickens!!!!!! this poem roxs glad to have been able to read it!!!
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Unfortunately smalz’s was unavailable to judge this contest so it is being judged by the Moderater Cyberartist we apologizing on there behalf for the length of time it has taken but we do try to allow the contest holder the opportunity to judge there contest first. An interesting take on the contest you have a strange sense of humour But I guess we all can be accused of suicide by junk food.
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wow! i loved this poem! the last verse was really greusome! i am very glad you entered this into my contest. good luck to you and keep em coming, you have a wonderful talent and it should not go to waste.... i'll be reading your work in days to come, don't disappoint me
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This is the Justin I love...You paint a brilliant picture with your imagery in our minds and then twist it into a humours piece just for a little effect...You never cease to put a smile on my face...All the best in the contest!
Tory Lin
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wow this is certainly different..and I applaud you for that. I mean everyone writes about humans being killed and I think it's rather nice that you made it different. This was an excellent piece..very descriptive..I could see and hear everything going on.
Good luck in the contest
xoxo
xxBOIxx
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