My legs tremble
As we touch
And in the way you look at me
It's as if your eyes
See through into my heart
And past my lies
I crave for you
To take me
Into your loving arms
To kiss my lips, to never quit
Please, hold me now
Remind me how we fit
I don't want
This to end
Say that you love me
Whisper it softly in my ear
My heartbeat races
As you say there's nothing to fear
I feel your
Heart beating
How could we be so in touch
It's as if we're one soul
Two severed hearts put together
To make each other whole
Author notes
Written July 16th, 2006
A contest entry
- Your love poem to him by Avi337.
300 points, ended October 22, 2006, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love by your.guardian.angel.
300 points, ended December 17, 2006, 48 entries
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well i reread it and i still love it...one reason is because i found someone once again that makes me feel this way, and wants what this poem states....i love it...great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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i loike this poem alot its true.....if only some would read this and feel the same way i do.
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hmm i read but never commented... I LIKE IT!!!
♥ ♥
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beutiful
aww this is beutiful! i wish you entered it into my contest! it has an option for dark souls finding love, unfortanitly there are no prewrights aloud... i love how your final pair of lines sums it up. its extraordanary. it kind of reminds me of my most commonly used stile of poetry, kind of freeform but with a great flow, a varieing rimescheem and an exelant finaly!(plus mixing up dark people with love definatly one of my favorit senarios) wonderful!
good job
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I have now a mental image of two broken people as one... a neverending love that can not be matched!!! I like this one heaps!!!
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so beautiful. i love it! keep it up gurl.
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wooah. I loved this poem! I re-read it and re-read and I could deff relate about what you wrote. great use of the words. the words created a strong image of two people in love. great work. Keep them comming! keep in touch!
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wow girll, this is amazing. everything you wrote about is so real, i can just picture two people together, ahh this was awesome!! keep it up =]
xx.
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