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first thought

Not a day goes by that she's not my first thought of the day,
I see her in her arms and I wish it could be me that way,
I look into her soft beautiful eyes and say,
I'll love you with all my heart, from now to my very last day.

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Written July 16th, 2006

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  • light to a dreamer gold member
    January 11
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    This is different. It has little rhyme but nice flow and a lonely feeling in it Nice work.


  • VanGoghNights
    July 19, 2006
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    SWEET!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Short but sweet!! z
    z
    ♥Savina♥


  • LonelyAlways
    July 17, 2006
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    Oh bob..


  • paperflowers
    July 17, 2006
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    poignant, sombre, perfect

    awwwwwwww, so lovely. such gentle sweet languge and flow. truly romantic. the kind of words a lady dreams of inspiring.

    and the sorrow, the melancholy of the 'not happy ending' isn't cliche, instead its a perfect balance with the genuine affection emoted through the pen. the piece is perfect, in its imperfect reality. so rarely does life give us what we dream.

    you leave me in tears, but it was worth it. ~pf