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Life and Living

Missing image
Stones,
our  steps
to  the  bold
universe of
truth.

Grasp
the soul,
take us to
a place in our
heart.

Lift
me up,
carry me,
and let me live
free.

Free
of  my
own will and
guide me always
safe.

Love,
power
that we each
must live by, then
grow.

Author notes

Ok, first time trying this form, so please forgive the choppy go at it.  But, hey can't learn if I don't try, right?
Written July 15th, 2006

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  • ShelleyA gold member
    July 23, 2006
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    You're very welcome Storm. I love this form. I hope you come to love it as well. Take care. Shelley

  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    July 23, 2006
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    Thank you for the comments. I appreciate it. And now I will be more willing to try and write in this form again.

    Storm

  • ShelleyA gold member
    July 23, 2006
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    Very nice first attempt at this form. Very good imagery,flow and tone. Very nice descriptives. Lovely expression of emotion. Good transition between each of the following lanturnes. Each lanturne can also stand alone and not lose its meaning. Thank you for your entry. Shelley

  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    July 15, 2006
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    I'm not sure about the sentence thing. I don't usually use puntuation in my poetry, very rarely anyway. I checked out the web site she had listed, and saw three differen examples. And maybe I got this all wrong, and if so, I will learn from it.

    Thanks for the comments though. I appreciate them
    Storm
  • Poetic Fanatic
    July 15, 2006
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    Maybe it is a contest, but fair game is not a shame, I really like your last one! If not my own, my vote would be on you.
    One point though, aren't we supposed to complete every sentence?
    I'm just now learning the form. lol I still applaud your last part.

    Tommy
  • Poetic Fanatic
    July 15, 2006
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    Very nice,
    The last lanturne is great! Best wishes for your success.

    Tommy

  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    July 15, 2006
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    Thank you. I wasn't too sure if I was doing it properly. I see them and I understand the patterning of the lanturne, but hwriting one is a differnt thing all together. Appreciate your comments

    Storm

  • Sai Babas Lotus
    July 15, 2006
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    You did it well Lovely imagery and flow. Great lanturne series. Good choice of words.

    All the best,
    Charishma
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