how did you recover from such abuse
how are you back in the state that you are now?
how did you slide past all of that temptation
how are you a recovered cutter??
why do i ask you such questions
ill tell you why
a year ago, i found that my best friend is a cutter
i cant talk about it without a shaking voice
i remember how my heart skipped a beat when she told me
she doesn't know that i cryed myself to sleep that night
she doesn't realize that i still care about her
she doesn't know that i times i question myself if she is dead or alive
i remember that i befriended her
for she had no friends
i remember how we met in camp
we became the best of friends
i remember how she laughed
at every word i said
does she know how i feel
that my feelings are real?
she is only 14
and i only 13
does she know that my world stopped spinning
when she told me
i don't know where she is now
i haven't heard from her for months
her dad was an alcoholic
i can only imagine the worst
for the first time since 4th grade, she didn't invite me to her birthday party.
please tell me how you got past all of this
please tell me how you spared your loved ones feelings.
please tell me that you did it without tears
please tell me how you are a recovered cutter
Author notes
scary lawn gnomes
Written July 15th, 2006
A contest entry
- ~My 1st Contest!!!~ by HeroinHailee.
300 points, ended August 29, 2006, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I don't really agree with the last comment... I was touched by this write... To be honest, I would not change this, I likle it the way it is. Theway youb wrote this gives it a feeling that it is a very personal subject to you...
It's been a while since you wrote this so I'm not sure what else to say... But it's from personal experience, isn't it?
Whatever... Keep on writing!
Ann
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yeah this is a shitty situation.
i wont cut your poem up too bad, since you are/were only 13.
if you were 25 writing this it'd be a different story.
basically, this poem reads as if you're vocally telling me a story. it sounds like you are talking about it to me, instead of writing a poem about it.
may i recommend more literary devices, such as metaphors, similies, personification, foreshawdowing, etc etc.
try decribing the feeling behind this, internally, not just the emotions that have names.
how does it feel inside you? what does it smell like?
sound like?
what effect does it have on you aura? mindset?
this isn't a bad start, but i definitely think you need more practise, and some research on other poets in the past, perhaps tp check out some techniques you might want to copy into your own work. -
Yes I understand this and you are a very good poet. You ask the questions people dont bother to ask. Thanks for your lovely comments on my poem. Your friend will of appreciated your suport and if she confided in you it means she trusts you. Ime sure she will get back to you in time, either when she needs you or she sorts herself out. But dont fear the worst, Be positive.
Good luck in the competition.
Andy xx -
"that i times" - it should be "that at times".
I know this feeling. Both my ex and I were cutters, so. It's very concerning, and I hope your friend is better.
Thanks for entering! -
i obviously write this to a (Was) recovering cutter (abusedflower) i hope you enjoy!!
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a pirates life for me
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well thats just it, i too have no answers, i -was- a recovering cutter.. then i relapsed, it takes so much to sstop a habbit that makes you feel normal when youre that low.. i can bring you no answers, but i can help you help her in many ways...
like me i am known to push people away, i see it as not hurting them in my wake, "I try to push them all away, they push me back and want to stay, and thats the one good thing i have.."
be there for her, let her talk to you, dont let her push you away, even if she pushes you hard, push her back. everyone needs a friend, it makes it harder to accept death if you have people who care enough about you...
i wish i could give you more answers, but i truly have none to speak of, i too ask myself these questions... best of luck!
*which member if any would you like to be of my AP family?
~Abused
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Hey, I like this, this was really sad and true and something a lot of people have gone through. It almost made me cry honestly because I've just gone through something like that cause one of my best friends cut and I didn't know what to do when she told me...but thank God she stopped...anyways, I loved this a lot!
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