A Lion and a Bull were not finding life dull
Of each other they'd had a bellyful.
The Lion declared in a majestic voice.
"If I could choose you'd not be my choice".
The Bull who was far from his familiar field.
Said "Well here I am and I will not yield."
For they were tied in a poetry competition
And no tie-break rules had yet been written.
We can't have two winners, that's not right
so the Lion said. . . "We'll have to fight."
The Bull -- who was an intelligent creature,
Knew the Lion's teeth were a powerful feature.
"I know how we can settle this confusion
and put an end to your unwelcome intrusion."
"Let's each write a verse in praise of the other
and submit them to an unbiased poetry lover."
The lion wrote in praise of the bull's finer points.
His thrusting horns and his meaty joints.
The bull started writing . . . after a little pause.
About the lions sharp teeth and sharper claws.
They became so involved in what they were writing,
they forgot all the reasons why they'd been fighting.
So that is how my poem now ends
With Lion and Bull the firmest of friends
Author notes
I was given a title and invited to write a poem to go with it. I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.
Written July 15th, 2006
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Thank you for taking the time to give feedback. The judging must have been difficult.
Writing the poem was fun and I must thank you for the stimulus, it may never have been written without you.
Keep up the good work. You might inspire me again
Jim -
Jim, I think you did a wonderfully creative work here. I like that you did a humor piece, I think there were only a couple of these submitted, you and another. It kind of made us want to try a humor contest title contest later when we have more time. I admit this was a hard one to work with, but you without a doubt mastered your challenge effortlessly. Thank you so much for sharing your work with me.
jamie -
Thanks for reading and writing Tony.
Jim -
Back of the net ! .......
Clever little write this one ! ... reminded me of Marriott Edgar's 'Albert And The Lion' .. although the story and ending isn't the same the conversational delivery to this piece is quite similar ... V. good stuff ! -
It seemed a good idea to have a poetry competition within a poetry competition so I went with it.
If only I could draw I might do that just for fun. However I can't so I'll leave it for someone else.
Thanks for all your nice comments.
Jim -
Taking time off and getting healthier sounds like a great idea. Good for you!
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What a great story! I thought of children argueing- what a wonderful way to distract them from the fight- a contest of who could praise who the best.
When I was a kid, my mom would make us sit under the table together until we kissed and made up. Often we'd feign making up then go off playing, happy that we'd pulled one over on mom.
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Thanks for the comment (and in rhyme too) Our little disagreement was quickly forgotten. You stood your corner and I respected that in the end.
I'm actualy Cancer which is possibly why I am so crabby.
Jim -
Thanks Linda. They would have to be very short as I am not too good at the descriptive filler that forms a part of many good short stories. I hide behind the little tricks of poetry as in this case. Still it was nice of you to say so and would be a challenge over the summer months. Thanks.
Jim -
you would really do well with short stories, this was done well..thank you for sharing and good luck..Linda
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Well, I don't know if you are a Leo, but I am a Taurus.
This poem made me think of our fight and abhor us.
Please accept my apology for my part in all that triviality. -
Careful or I'll need to buy a new cap!
Thanks for your kind words and loud applause. It is pleasing to see so many people appearing to like my efforts.
Jim -
I had a similar intention as I said to Zev (above) but it meramorphosed as I wrote.
Glad you like it.
Jim
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This is adorable! Of course, the flow and rhyme is flawless (hence your name
) and you did a wonderful job with the title...I loved every line and at the end I was longing to read more of your beautiful work
Lynda
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My first thought was Zodiac signs but then I changed my mind. I now see this as a metaphorical story of the most unlikely characters actually growing to like each other through a common interest
A most interesting journey
Von
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Hi nice neice.
I think I am in the mood for more writing at the moment and it feels nice.
Jim -
hi dear uncle
I'm glad you're active in writing again. This is a nice friendly cute poem.
Wish you the best luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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Thanks for your kind words and loud aplause.
Jim -
Hi Chrissie nice to hear from you. Once I got started it seemed to flow. The hard part was putting down the first few words but the title worked its magic.
Thanks for your good wishes but I know there is stiff competition here, not least with your offering. May the best poet . . . etc
Jim -
Thank you kind lady. your comments were much appreciated.
Jim -
We all have a child somewhere within us and I think mine wrote this one. Thanks for your kind words.
Jim -
I can uderstand what you mean Zev. I did at first think of the personification of Greek Gods and then of Taurus and Leo but this is what appeared as I got going.
Thanks for your kind words for something out of your zone.
Jim -
Thanks for those kind words AA
Jim -
I would say this plain beautiful,
Reminds me of Lewis Carroll,
As I said of your teacher thing,
This has to it some real zing. -
I love this!!! It also kind of goes with the positive energies theme I have just started to judge a contest on.
It really made me smile, and I love how they are friends at the end.
I would have thought this to be a very difficult subject to write about, but you seem to have managed it perfectly here.
Good luck - but you probably won't need it
Love and Laughter,
Chrissie
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This was fun. Very good concept and with a wonderful underlying
lesson. Great work.
Soulful Woman -
Now this is a really cute poem with a message for all of us here at allpoetry. Thanks for sharing. childlike faith
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a little too cute for my taste and for the ancient feel of the title...but definitely well thought out and kind of like Aesop's fables...it just slightly misses conveying the ancient majesty of these two archetypal animals...but, as others have commented, it is a refreshing change from suicide and angst...good luck in the contest, (but is it a matter of LUCK...who knows?)
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Very cute and very nicely written I like one of the others find it like the fairy tales with a moral. This had very good imagination
Good luck with the contest
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Thanks Wolf,
Your comment and Ann's have made me look again and I am liking it better myself. Thank you for your kind words and loud applause.
Jim -
Very...very good poem...I really enjoyed reading this...It means much more and has deeper ancient ties than perhaps you have intended.
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Thanks Ann, I hadn't thought of Aesop but I take your point there is (a little) something there.
I was simply trying to avoid the actual conflict implied by the given title.
I am so glad you dropped in and I'm pleased you liked my offering.
Jim -
I like this as it reminds me of an Aesop fable. I used to like reading these as a child because they always had a moral to them, didn't they? It has a nice "feel good" factor, a refreshing change from the angst and misery poems. Good luck in the contest.
Ann -
Thank you Lily. It would be nice to think I could follow a theme but . . . Why not give me a title and I'll try but no promises.
Jim -
Thank you for those kind words and I am flattered by your request. I hope your grandson enjoys it as well.
Jim -
This is brilliant, really good idea. Sweet story, funny write. Do a series of this, it's nice, I'd love more. Lily
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kinda cute! very imaganitive! Thanks for sharing. May I copy for my grandsons scrapbook. I think he will enjoy.
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