Osmosis soul searching
In the dark of night
Clinging to every breath
Dipped in silvered streams of light
Between two worlds
Souls combine
What lies in my heart
Woven in you divine
Mingled words solve the puzzle of this heart
Softly spoken dreamlike words that entwine
Reaching every pore
Every touch upon touch
Symbiotic, love that opens the door
One heart
One soul
We are two
These simple words
Are for you
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Written April 1st, 2003
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Yeah.. I could do.
might have a bash at something later.. got wood on my mind at the moment.. building fitted wardrobes with Rick... wood ..wood and more wood.. maybe should do a poem about wood
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excellent
hey Gill
I realy like this
was thinking though that you could play with it and break it down or break it up. Slow the readers tongue and make them wait for words to come.
Pause me
my breath it waits to start again
Inhaling
Vacumes -
excellent
this is a really touching poem. i love your imagry. thanks for visiting my site by the way
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i'm all giddy like a 5 year old that ate too many chocolate covered coffee beans.. i'm going to be in a mood for the rest of the night.. and my dinner is going to spoil.. but when writing is as sweet as this.. who needs supper.. chaka boom baka..
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very nicely expressed poem, well written as well. I enjoyed it much, thanks.
Ali -
Mmmmmmm I really enjoyed this.
Anna
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goods
flowing and seeping from one word to the other like sand, though for some reason this one seemed kinda extra dry to me, don't know, maybe caz i am thristy.....damn broken faucet....
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lovely write
Oh what a lovely write!
I'm going to print it out now 'grins'
I'm studying biology at university now...but we are studying about bacteria and stuff...not as interesting and eloquent as this poem
heehee.
So sweet and romantic, especially the lines:
'Osmosis soul searching
In the dark of night'
And:
'Symbiotic, love that opens the door
One heart
One soul
We are two
These simple words
Are for you'
Unique use of terms 'osmosis' and 'symbiosis' here.
I love every word of this poem. Also, thanx so much for your kind comment on my author page.
Best Wishes and Take Care
Di
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i really enjoyed this one.
especially the osmosis/ symbiosis parts. . .(helped me brush up on my biology a little)
well written, very well phrased.
cat -
excellent
One heart , one soul ,.....loved those words If you wrote this for someone special , someone is very lucky
Reenie
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AHHhhh Thanks Bill and Joyce for your kind words.. always glad to see friends dropping by
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Man your words hit me between the eyes. The depths of your thoughts amaze me. Good one girlfriend.
Red -
Ahhhh....
ya have a touch of the romantic in you!
This found a smile in my heart!
I did enjoy!
Keep penning on my friend!
Bill -
Thanks Jake and cristos for your kind words.. hehehehe Jake..maybe Barbs.. has some old timer's disease like me ..ROFL
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nice poem, i like the way you make the words look like they belong with each other...very nicely done
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i think barb has osmosis and dry rot confused.
anyway...
your choice of words was quite excellent here. really made for fine reading and clever visuals. and like me, your a hopeless romantic at heart. never hurts to remain hopeful, and this write points to that. -
LMAO... HEHEHEH you two have made me smile
hope you boat floats..
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This is lovely. I can just see a sleeping couple sort of mixing into one being like an amoeba. I can't believe it, a romantic amoeba! Great one.
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I had a friend who's boat had osmosis, he wasn't feeling anything like this
Lovely poem Gill, symbiosis.. a true partnering, i'm not sure it can ever last forever, but i like to think it can..
Barbsx
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