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Garden Knights

Come little children
gather to me,
I have a tale to tell,
a story don't you see,
of knights and battles,
princes and princesses
and tiny hero's
with golden tresses.
Who fought a goblin,
a big nasty thing,
who lived in the tree
next to the swing.
He grunted and squealed
tried to eat all the babes
even stole sandwiches
their mothers had made.
The prince of the garden
said "this cannot be
from this evil goblin
we must be free"
Up stepped the knights
wooden swords held high
"no worries our prince
for you we would die.
We'll chase this goblin
down out of the tree,
push him from the garden,
just you wait and see"
"Oh brave knights"
the princess said to the throng
"with you at our sides
what can go wrong,
This goblin will be defeated
that is plain to see,
~and if you hurry
There'll be time for tea~"
So off went the knights
in armour, with shields
their swords unsheathed
surely the goblin must yield.
One brave knight
stepped in-front of the rest
called to the goblin
"Come give me your best"
without hesitation
the goblin was there
waving his arms
he looked like a bear
not the cuddly
teddy kind
all fangs and teeth
and claws combined.
The knight he was scared
but stood his ground
as the goblin
uttered such a sound
charging straight at the knight
stood alone
in clouds of dust, swirling arms
the outcome was unknown
for ages
no one could see a thing
had the knight fallen?
did he win?
suddenly silence!
the picture became clear
the goblin lay dead
the crowd gave a cheer.
The princess ran forward
embraced the proud knight
tired but still standing
after the fight.
she gave him a kiss
he pledged her his life
the prince said aloud
she should become his wife.
So to the sounds
of every ones laughter
they all lived
happily ever after.

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Written July 14th, 2006

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  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 12, 2007

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    Thank-you for your entry, this was a great contest and your poem added to that. Please enter as many of the later rounds as you feel able, we'd love to have you.
    Jeff and Sue


  • Shakes-spear
    September 29, 2006
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    The only thing missing is Merlin! This was a joy to read! Keep em comming, The Shaker


  • sweethelper
    July 22, 2006
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    this is truely , i must say , an excellent write !! I loved the way you wrote the rhyme in the form of a story and also the way you explained a few lines !! i just love it !! thank you so much for this tremendous entry and best wishes in the contest !!

    your true fan ,
    TRUTHWRITER


  • July 14, 2006
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    a fabulous take on
    a children's nursery rhyme
    with so much detail and
    vivid imagery; i can so
    easily see myself reading
    this to children and them
    being just riveted by your
    words.
    a brilliant write; delightful to read!!
    lynn