drowning
suffocating
pulling me in
the things i used to know
things i never wanted to know
haunting
piercing
my memories of old
my knowledge of new
and everything in between
dying
burning
ice cold blood
red hot veins
systematic destruction
decay
dust
ashes to cinder
cinder to rust
distraught
devoured
ghosts of fallen souls
nothingness to tell
distant laughs and crys
remind me of my yells
Author notes
Written July 13th, 2006
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Reminds me of my own feelings at different points in my life. you posted this on my birthday! ( Just a random fact ) really like this style, very unique free verse.
Tink
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love the alliteration and imagery
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Excellant/Inspirational
I agree with all of the above. Great write/read. Similiar, yet very different, if you'ld like take a look and comment on my
'Depression/Transition'.
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That was awesome! Very descriptive, if I may say so myself. I can most definitely relate to the ending. Excellent poem!
Prince
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lots of hurt and alot of resentment, anger...it formed a gd poem though way to go!
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Sobering
I can feel the pain of an addiction in every word of this poem. I suppose it could be haunting situation in you feel trapped and hopeless. Your choice of words really convey the pain and emotion that was being felt. great job! -
strong write you have here. Your anger is very aparent which can be a good thing as long as you have the ability to deal with the anger. Great write, keep it up and keep on penning
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strong emotions, this is a poem full of pain I can relate to... well written and the words flow with ease this is a good show of dark poetry....I'll have to read more of your works...
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DAMN GOOD, EXCELLENCE BY FAR
SS man this is some good s**t. I felt this it was really powerful. A great express of a feeling that that you feel so frequently. This was just dark enought to fit you it wasn't ebony black but it wasn't gray either. Good work.
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This is amazing. I love ALL the words you put in it. This is very deep and full of emotion. Great job. I love this. Its awesome!! Well keep it up.
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if you liked that one you should read a few others of mine im glad you liked that poem i havent written in a while and thought it sucked im glad to know that it didnt thank you, you and everyone else that commented just made my day
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The poem is amazingly much like its title; I felt as though I was drowning in your words and that was beautiful. Great choice of words keep it up.
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Good Work!
I like this! Even though there were no punctuation marks, etc it flowed really well. It's refreshing to see an eaysy read like this. Very vivid in imagery. dark, while not being 'black'/glooomy and very descriptive for such a short piece. Good Work! -Emmjay
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man! every poem I read gets better and better, but after reading this I'm not sur eit can get better. AMZING poem and great job!!
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wow, this poem really left me with a creepy feeling. i kinda reminded me of the movie that i just watched, but the whole feeling of drowning is a scary thing. i thought that you did a great job in showing all of this and i really enjoyed reading it.
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Amazing. Full of pain and anger. I really enjoyed reading this. Awesome write. Great job, keep up the good work.
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This reminds me of my ocean nightmare poems. Don't you hate it when something is subconciously pulling you down and you have no idea what it is? You feel trapped in the current pulling you and you have no way of escaping it without knowing why its pulling youn down in the first place! Awsome write!
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nice poem. I really like it. Its truthful and very angry. Anger is very human...
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