Your all I think about your face is burned into my mind
My hearts in fragments but my pain is becoming harder to hide.
You of all people should realize my hidden pain
The torture I put upon myself runs through my every vein.
I'm tired of trying to explain how I feel
I don't think your ever going to believe my feelings are real.
I cant hardly sleep I'm always thinking of you
I try to figure it out I contemplate what the hell I'm supposed to do.
If you walked away from me today
I would still be here waiting searching for the right things to say.
We were supposed to stay close through think and thin
But my darling I think the end is beginning to win.
In my heart I realize I'm starting to lose you
The thought brings tears to my eyes do you care or do you just want me to let you be?
Your my shoulder to cry on when I lose it all
Can you honestly say you'd catch me if I fall?
Every note you write me Ive kept
Every time you unknowingly hurt me Ive wept.
Our relationships have all failed in the past
But I thought friendships were supposed to last.
I love you now and forever I need to know
Will you ever try to love me or will you let me go?
If the day comes you give me a chance would I have your heart?
Or would you prove me wrong and rip me apart?
This is my final attempt to make you see
Ill love you forever will you ever be with me?
Author notes
This poem was written to one of my very best friend. Here latly Ive been loseing him and our friendship. I love him very much and maybe this poem will make him finally see that. </3
Written July 13th, 2006
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Hello..thank you for the comment on my poem I appericated it very much
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wow.. what a beautful write.. felt each and every word.. wel done.. very talented! x
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i can relate 2 what u said and must say u expressed ur self quite well
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awsome!
wow tiffy i love this poem, sorry i couldnt read it sooner i have been busy...so this is about travis ah?....well thats a relief at first i thought it was about me....um i guess thats just my ego huh, lol j/p...but i did think it was about me at first oh well, well have to go love yah bye!
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There is a balance in giving and receiving, a safety to develop in a relaxed natural rhythm of intimacy. You can acknowledge doubt in a rel but need not to burden with the challenge! There is no beginning of the end but rather a beautiful morning full of glowing light!! Growing together is being respectful of the other pain and offering the guarantee of thru thick or thin, of solidly being there if there is a fall.. A proven transformative process is taking place and a celebration of the hearts is strenghtening and healing the souls. I can say honestly he just saved me.. thank you - and i will love him forever and eternity NO MATTER WHAT!! No need to worry
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OMG I CAN TOTALLY RELATE TO THIS! Wow this was definitely a terrific write! I love it!!! Thanks for sharing and I'm pretty sure a lot of people can relate to this! Keep writing! I'd like to see some more poems from you!!
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Sorrowful read. I hate when the inevitable comes true and tugs and haunts at you. Good job. RobinRae.
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if he can't see the love in this piece, then i would have to say he is blind! This has so much love in it, that it is great! I love it myself! keep that pen forever flowing.
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"I cant hardly sleep" i dont know it doesnt sound right, maybe can instead of cant?
this help my attention right from the title. I like it. i can relate to most of it too.
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I can sincerely say that I can relate to this poem with all my heart, even if under slightly different circumstances. This poem expressed the anguish perfectly.
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very well written best wishes for himto return your love god bless you keep up the good work
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Very emotional and full of power. I hope your friend is true to you and realizes the depth of what he has right there before him. Friendship is priceless and we are blessed and lucky to have those who cross our paths in love. Blessings to you and your friend.
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This is beautiful, full of love and need.
There's a spelling mistake I can see but easily fixed...
"We were supposed to stay close through think and thin" Should it say "thick"?
Also, maybe...
"Every note you write me Ive kept
Every time you unknowingly hurt me Ive wept."
Instead of "Ive" maybe it can be "I have"?
Just acouple of suggestions...
But this is great. Hope things works out for you.
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aww I liked it...And it had alot of feeling in it 2...And the rhyming was excellent...Didn't feel forced at all...And I can relate in some ways....But not in all...But I think that you did a great job on this poem...I'll read more of yours!!
~^*Sara*^~
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