Orange, Yellow, Purple, and Blue
Technicolor Dreams
Drifting on the waves ashore
Falling through the trees
Washed away and cleansed of sins
Slice your wrist, open the wound
Sit and watch the blood pour out
Sew it up and put it away
Whats left is in the past
Don't take love for granted
Take life for granted
Human flesh reveals the color
Technicolor Dreams
Ate away at your sins inside
Outside the demons lurk
Take your soul but not your love
Take your hope but not your faith
Love and faith devour the clouds
What you do at this very moment
Makes the future and creates the past
Orange paints away at the sunset
Yellow squeezes on by
Purple fills the open sky
Blue pushes its way through
Technicolor Dreams
Lies all inside your head.
Author notes
Written July 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- lyrica by Oleander.
300 points, ended July 15, 2006, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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What you do at this very moment
Makes the future and creates the past
How true, enjoyed this whole work, stay strong. ¦:¬{ -
i really like the poem, i loved how you took something so depressing, really a very sad topic, and put it in the candy coating of the technicolor dreams. it was really a good blend, very interesting and an enjoyable read. keep writing, i really liked this!!!!!!!
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Well done dark hope poem... there was great imagry.. though some i couldn't appreciate because i'm colourblind.. the language was very strong... and a great ending to tie everything together and keep it dark... very well done..
"Drifting on the waves ashore
Falling through the trees"
that is my favourite line in the piece.. great imagry.. well done.. keep writing -
Vivid
Very sinister and cynical look at life, love, hope and faith. Technicolor imagery and good flow. My favorite line is "Orange paints away at the sunset." Very original play on words. Best wishes in the contest
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just fabulous!!!
it felt like watching a spectacular fireworks show!!!
The imagery is vivid, creative and the messages are
so seamlessly woven in; it is a stunning poem!!!
the lines:
"Don't take love for granted
Take life for granted"
is the perfect summation for this amazing display of writing!!!
lynn
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Ouch! I felt that! Great pace and flow, brilliant use of word placement and punctuation.The imagary is very vivid and the emotions created are tangible. There is so much disillusionment and heartache yet there is a touch of hope. Well done!
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