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As I study you ( Unfinished)

When I look into your eyes,
And look around for you,
I try to look past the lies,
And look only for the new.
As I sit here,
I close my eyes nice and tight.
I try to hear,
Then try to imagine the bright shining light.
We have to remain strong,
If not for me then for you.
This is one place we can't go wrong,
If only we knew.
I told you I wasn't leaving,
I told you the cliques don't matter.
As long as you are loving,
Then together, we'll climb the latter.
The latter twoards the sky,
To get us out of this place.
I glance over at you and catch your eye,
Then freeze as I study your face.
You smile and wonder,
What could possibly be going on.
Suddenly we start to hear the thunder,

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its not finished yet...I kinda got stuck..I'll finish tho...PROMISE!
Written March 31st, 2003

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  • l05tnc0nfu5ed
    September 3, 2003
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    hm even though you may not have finished it and you got stuck...what you have wrote so far, is awesome. its..beautiful. i like it a lot. you've got talent!

  • daisy
    March 31, 2003
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    i really loved this poem, i can relate to it in many ways. thanks for sharing.