Limbless trees
My tongue wrapped around a flying trapeze
The things that I pride myself on
rarely breath threw the pores of a relationship
I don't know if its because I'm multidimensional
or just balless
Quite frankly boneless
I cant seem to find a way out of these cheeks
The cracks of my teeth
Lost in the blindness of their eyes
Something supple isnt necessarily inexperienced
But I can't find my way out of my own Will
And I am happy to find that it still exists
in this formed spirit
Drugged and dormant
Limbless and plastic wrapped
A sweet pulsing ghost of something
that never truly was
I'm sick of tying my tongue in two
just because
Limbless trees and
My Motor is running
I just can't find the keys
Author notes
I hope that you enjoy this. It may be on the sort of odd side.
Its about being shy and afraid that I wont be met with acceptance.
Written July 12th, 2006
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Yeah, you're right, it is kind of odd but I like it. I like the range of language and the people above me have said that this poem is unique and I'd agree with that. I like it a lot though, it doesn't seem forced at all, which is good and it flows well from one line to the next. Nice work!
Sarah -
I feel like this sometimes... well, really alot! You caputred the feelings and emotions in this really nice. Keep up the good writing and never ever quite.
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Drugged and dormant
Limbless and plastic wrapped
A sweet pulsing ghost of something
that never truly was
I'm sick of tying my tongue in two
just because
Wow... amazing words. Your poems are always so deep and unique... they're hard to decipher yet you always manage to get the message across so eloquently. Wonderful write! -
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very good
yes it is rather strangely diferent but thats fine it is still an enjoyable write and diferent is good sometimes
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Very unique, but I like it. A lot. I'm having a hard time finding words to describe this, but that's a good thing - it's making me think a lot. Hahaha. I really love the way that you use your words - you seem to choose them very carefully, and they work wonderfully in your writing. I'm impressed with your talent. Keep it up
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This is a wonderful write.
I love the rhythm and background that you used here.
Great work and thanks for sharing this!
Allen0826 -
Thank you so much Pete!
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Brilliant!!!
Thought this was a great poem, A great use of launguage with a very unique rhythm. I espessially liked the line "I cant seem to find a way out of these cheeks
The cracks of my teeth" A beautiful write!!!!
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