life can be so hard to go through,
wishing on the impossible,
praying for just on miracle,
hoping to find someone you lost,
dreaming dreams that never come true,
crying tears you cried before,
facing problems you had before,
even staring death in the eye,
watching a true love fall apart,
watching kids waste their life away,
watching homeless people suffer,
waiting for someone to come home,
who may never come home again,
and facing a deadly disease,
people wonder why life is so hard,
no one will ever really know.
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Written July 12th, 2006
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GREAT POEM!
Amazing!...I haven't been on in a while and this is the first poem I have read and I truely Loved it! Keep up the good work! -
well life happens for a reason. and things at times do turn bad, I just dont understand why either, hmm, well expressed here, thanks for sharing, keep up the awesome poetry.
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This is great. I like it. I especially like:
'people wonder why life is so hard,
no one will ever really know.'
You're right. people will never know how hard life really is, until they face it. And it can be brutal to face life when you're going through a tough time. well anyways...Keep up the amazing writing.
~Jen~ -
so many desper and again real emotions, evrybody can give you friendly advice how to fix your hair, but tell someone how to fix being homeless, or with some deadly desease. Divine poem, with "into" spirit, and also, like raged as spice, even a little of sarcasm. Beutifull
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Great Read
I really like this write. Very well written. I hope that I get the chance to read more of your work very soon, as I hope you will do too. Great Read.
Luke Williams -
this is so true in many ways... peace and harmony...shzoosy
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great poem
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i agree with sabrina, it is a good write with a great message, but its a little rough.
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We all have our ownb corsses to bear. Sometimes you don't have to bear themn alone and sometimes you do. Life can have its good points too. I can see you have gone through tremendous hardships.
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very encompassing in its message but the flow is slightly off in the last 5 lines...but just adjust that and you will have a good poem..
eliza -
It's good, although I agree with the other two, replace words with synonyms. It would make the poem so much better. Other than that though, the poem is excellent
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Fantastic... you have really got it so right.
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I agree with Sabrina.If you sat down and pondered on it a bit more,you could make this really great.It is good now as is,but there are a lot of repetitive words and if you could find words with the same meaning and replace some of them,this would be a terrific write.Keep it up.You will get the hang of it!!
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Not a bad write at all-could I suggest possibly replacing centain wourds with synonoums, i.e. watching has been used quite often etc. Just a thought. Otherwise good read-thank you
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