It was the only thing to do, I thought--
and I'm a self-professed
master at thinking--
so I watched you speak
with fervor.
The only thing to do,
as a girl in love with words,
but terrified of using them.
And I would hate to interrupt
when you so love hearing yourself speak.
Did you think
I loved my thoughts
and silence?
"Independence runs through your veins,"
I wanted to say, but couldn't--
for not even silence can control you.
The only thing, to grant
your silently demanded favor,
while you thought you granted mine.
Author notes
Sometimes it really sucks having a quiet personality. Especially when many people love the sound of their own voice.
All feedback appreciated.
Written July 12th, 2006
A contest entry
- Creative Title Contest by verses on flesh.
600 points, ended August 13, 2006, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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bravo
This is funny, but entirely too true! I'm a big-mouth who really does try to listen to other folks...at least I KNOW that I'm full of hot air...and, like you, I doooo love words.... bravo... bravo ...bravo...
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I felt excited by the first I read of you, because allpoetry is a big maze in which it is difficult to find one's way to really good stuff. This too is very good. Makes me want to read more of your poems.
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Congrats on the placing. Very thought provoking, and it describes me to a tee! The quite part. Sometimes I feel lost in a world of indifferent people bent on their own opinions, as if theirs was the only one of importance. It is even more devastating when it is your own spouse.
Thank you for sharing.
Rous -
Congratulations for winning silver with this great poem - some great entries here - so many different titles given out.
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I absolutely love this work, I have read it several times since it was submitted, it actually spurned me to go read more of you poems. You did a very eloquently expressive work here, and have made excellent use of your title. I really related to this piece, as well as the author's comments. And I felt you described it perfectly. Thank you so much for sharing your amazing talent with me.
jamie -
watching someone speak rather than hearing them had me a little on edge until you closed it out in some way with silently demanded.
Good Luck in the contest.
Jim -
*smiles* I love this, it's different. I had to read it twice for it to sink in. Thanks for sharing
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i love this poem
We're both drinking from the same cup. When I read your author comment it felt as though I wrote it myself, you and I are very much alike. I love this poem, love this poem, love this poem... -
This is a wonderful write. Much wisdom within these words. Your imagery portrays the silent one being overpowered by the one who speaks. So often true. I enjoyed this ...thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. Dawn
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