If every night I see without you
means you'd be lonely too
Id crush the stars
before Id do that to you
I cant sleep without seeing your eyes
can't be awake without thinking of you
I guess their right, I guess its true
There is no me without you
The glass reflects the fragile time
Time we thought wouldn't decline
I guess I was wrong
and now I'm dying
Its lonely without you
Its bleak and its bland
I wish you were here
just holding my hand..
Author notes
Please critique.. There is a long story behind this and if you really want to know what it is, then let me know and I will send it to you, but yeah otherwise.. just critique it..
Written July 12th, 2006
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this is so beautiful and really cute. Hopefully things work out for you..
Rose -
Such feelings are in these lines. Nice job Keep up the good work.
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wonderful poem
This is a beautiful poem. -
very beautiful.
<3 -
it sounds like lyrics, its really beautiful. It feels really fragmented which adds no end to the overall tone -that feeling that nothing you do eases how you feel - can't sleep for the dreams, and cant get to sleep, but being awake is torture
i know this feeling well and you portrayed the feeling of quiet desperation very, very well
Hannahx
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