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souls death

when the world is fallen all around you
and you have no where else to go
and things just keep going wrong
you have no emotions left to show
uve lost the ones youve loved
burried them in the ground
family is no longer your support
and your friends are not to be found
your ocean of tears will no longer fall
your heart has finally hardened from it all
your sick to your stomach, your insides a mess
the mountains of stress u've managed to supress
your searching for answers, any help you can get
but nothings to be found, destinys already set
misguided, misleaded, your so confused
you try your best and still left beaten and bruised
you stand up again, to fight another fight
another chance, this time to make it right
another dissapointment, finally a tear
a hollow feeling inside you begin to fear
the death of your soul and all that you were
your memories and hopes become a blur
hollow, a corpse , among the breathing
life now holds no more meaning

Author notes

basically when life has dealt you a difficult hand and hope is no longer existant. everything u ever cared for is ripped from you and life no longer holds meaning or has any purpose.when life becomes too hard. simply, what happens when you lose yourself.


Written July 12th, 2006

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  • Shadowless
    July 12, 2006
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    Amazing

    Very very VERY good! I like how you gathered all the negatives but the last two lines... Everything has a meaning just keep pushing. When you've been dealt shit, keep pushing, even when you can't push anymore. I learned that the hard way. Good Write, keep it up


  • Abscessed
    July 12, 2006
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    this was well penned - alot of heartfelt emotions in this write. I can definetly feel all the pain and despair that you must have been through

    Well done and keep writing
    abscessed


  • dragongurlz69
    July 12, 2006
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    omg it made me cry i feel like that right now


  • Kalima
    July 12, 2006
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    I know exactly how you feel. You really expressed thoughts and feelings into this write. Very good, but yet very sad. Keep it up! Staacey


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    July 12, 2006
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    very wonderful piece filled with emotion, loved the feel and flow of this piece. great write. keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny

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