Come and take a walk with me
I need you all to come and take a walk with me
I need you all to feel what I'm going through, see what I see
If you have time to take a walk with me
I say hey, like it's suppose to be
If you have time to take a walk with me
My hearts burning now, my soul's outta control
I can't even feel my heart beating pulse
I say hey, why is my life like this
She ruined my heart and truly was missed
She was my everything, anything I needed
When she said no my heart started to be dead
I say hey, this ain't the life for me
Why like this does she have to be
Come and take a walk with me
I need you all to come and take a walk with me
I need you all to feel what I'm going through, see what I see
If you have time to take a walk with me
I say hey, like it's suppose to be
If you have time to take a walk with me
She ruined my life, and took away my soul
She left me out in the freezing cold
I say hey, maybe it's suppose to be
She wasn't the one who was meant for me
She took a part of my life, that I could never forget
She made me feel like a pile of shet
I say hey, what's wrong with me
Why can't no one tell I loved her you see
Come and take a walk with me
I need you all to come and take a walk with me
I need you all to feel what I'm going through, see what I see
If you have time to take a walk with me
I say hey, like it's suppose to be
If you have time to take a walk with me
with me
Author notes
Written July 11th, 2006
A contest entry
- Take My Hand by x Gemini x.
600 points, ended January 26, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lyrical Love by Meyeryakov.
300 points, ended May 17, 2007, 9 entries
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Comments
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First, let me thank you for entering my contest.
Second:
Interesting way to convey, a bit confusing because of the repteting. Also, i PERSONALLY like puncuation.
Otherwise, this was good. -
Do you mean "supposed to be" instead of "suppose to be"? Well, other than that, it's a pretty decent piece. I'm guessing you chose the music option?
Well, anyways, good luck
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this is very pretty.... i really like this!!
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This was really good... I'm sure music would be great to this!... I really enjoyed this, you did a great job! ... Thanks for entering and good luck!
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