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Peace To All




 

The curfew of light called by crickets,
Eulogies for those war struck lives;
I gazed the starry sky feeling my crust,
Scarred by sharp spears and swift swords.
Hail mother earth, the end of war,
Shanti, paz and sukoon to all.

Decayed leaves rustling in the east wind,
Waiting for golden rays to entice life;
My ugly bloodstains too are washed
Through the rivers of the tears of joy.
Hail all warriors, the end of war,
Frieden, pace and la paix to all.

Morning strolls in this sultry garden
Livened by once valiant warriors,
Who were puppets of retarded governance,
Now walking slow with broad serene smiles.
Hail all soldiers, the end of war,
Modus vivendi and nirvana to all.

The calm scent that makes breath softer,
Swings to the gliding birds' lovely songs;
Now celebrating my most awaited funeral;
Synonyms for war lost in depths of extinction.
Hail all citizens of the lovely globe,
Peace, harmony and truce to all.

Author notes

The picture of a dove with an olive leaf symbolizes peace. The picture in the background too, is a symbol of peace.
The words in the last verse, as you may have guessed are foreign words for peace, showing the contribution of each nation to world peace. There ya go Tyler, something outta the box.  
Collaboration by red team for peace.
Written July 11th, 2006

A contest entry

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  • Revwilliamfoos
    May 6, 2007
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    wow

    very good
    thanks fopr entering
    love the papa


  • Whispered Secrets
    October 17, 2006
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    This is really interesting.
    Dove is love- olive leaf is peace. Very interesting.


    Good write. Nicely put together.


  • 0darkAngel0
    September 18, 2006
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    interesting write.
    well penned
    good luck
    and thank you for entering


  • perdisbeaute
    August 11, 2006
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    That's a very pretty write.


  • wakingdevil
    August 7, 2006
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    Congrats on the silver.I told you that you should have entered this contest for all the people.Best of luck


  • maa gold member
    August 4, 2006
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    hehe, I see that didi-maa has already given praise to your poem a couple of days ago, after you had just given birth to it ... but she didn't tell you that this is one of my absolute favourites of all the poems you have ever written.
    yeah.
    now you know.


  • James R
    July 27, 2006
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    Very nice write my friend a delight to read. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck.

  • maa gold member
    July 25, 2006
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    aaaaaah! oooooooooh!
    I'm not sure I understand, but it doesn't matter ...
    I understood though that it won !!!
    congratulations, yippie !!!


  • Raazi
    July 25, 2006
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    Actually, this poem did not win a trophy because it was the collaboration poem which decided which team won. And this poem won.

  • maa gold member
    July 25, 2006
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    I am pleased to return to this poem which has quite intrigued and impressed me. I am sorry to see that it wasn't awarded a trophy ...
    in my childlike belief-system, I think that peace-prayers should always win trophies ...

  • marrow
    July 14, 2006
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    As a collaboration, I think you all have done very well. It was a well- rounded piece that held interesting elements, and sported some great ideas.

    J


  • Tangled Angle
    July 13, 2006
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    no problem.


  • Raazi
    July 13, 2006
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    Thank you, Tyler.

  • Tangled Angle
    July 13, 2006
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    Well, this doesn't live up to my all time favorite "Palm Intersections" by Lavender Shadows, but I must say this is quite up there in that league. I thought this was absolutely BRILLIANT and you sure have reaised the bar very, very high for the other team to live up to! I don't think this is the best, but I think it is ONE of the best. Great teamwork and awesome job to you!


  • carrot
    July 11, 2006
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    I REALLY enjoyed this poem. In fact, this has been my favorite so far. And it really is fantastic. The end lines of each stanza are really amazing and definitely add to the overall feel of the poem. You all did a really fantastic job on this poem.


  • Ransomed-n-Redeemed
    July 11, 2006
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    I gotta say, the foreign languages in this poem is amazing. At first, it took me a moment to catch on, but then I was astonished. Great job!


  • Shakari
    July 11, 2006
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    This piece was truly beautiful! There was imagery, I believe that I found some metaphors, and the foreign language was a plus. I loved the flow and the meaning. Your collaboration is just fantastic and I don't know how your team can be beat...though, we shall see. I cannot be too quick to judge. Really though, all of you worked hard on this piece and created art. Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!

  • likeforeignpost
    July 11, 2006
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    I can't really think of any suggestions. This was a good piece and I liked how you supported peace by showing the horrors of a war's aftermath rather than not giving any imagery and making the poem bland. Good write, unique, I applaud.


  • DarkChildsKiss silver member
    July 11, 2006
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    Hey this poem is too good..... And I was going to use that same picture of a dove in my peace poem. Guess I'll have to find something else. But you all did an amazing job! And I truly admire the background. It goes perfect with you all's poem. Best of luck to all of you!
    ~Jerri~

  • The Pole Star
    July 11, 2006
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    hey, u used words of other languages here Anyways, this left me speechless. One thing which u make me convinced to say about you is that your vocabulary is increasing day by day...gud keep up! I will advice u 2 start teaching Eng. tuition's And gud use of alliteration (hope I pronounced that correctly) at some places

  • maa gold member
    July 11, 2006
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    this is quite an amazing poem, uditji.
    a warrior's homage to the end of war, sending blessings of peace to all. the atmosphere of it is rather dramatic and heroic, like a good hollywood-film (or if you prefer: bollywood-film .
    and the first lines in the final verse:
    The calm scent that makes breath softer,
    Swings to the gliding birds' lovely songs;
    show us what life is all about ...
    blessing all beings in so many different languages is the coronation of your masterpiece.
    a work of wisdom and art.

    didi maa


  • masterblaster gold member
    July 11, 2006
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    Hi my friend, lovely poem, if only it will come true,all the best, a big hug Di, now I understood the question,lol, my pleasure


  • Samyuktha P.C.
    July 11, 2006
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    Yipeeee... Hope the judges like this try.... Collaboration and mix... love ya.. sam

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