Ions collide shattering my dream
What once, was so negative
Now all so clear
Walk within this dream
Beyond the torn seam
Lying tattered and torn
Almost bare
all traces of doubt removed
negativity
has no clout
so positive
so real
Beyond the shattered horizon
Walk across
If you dare
to dreamland
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Written March 31st, 2003
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Like a fine wine that's not too ripe or too drab, this orchestrated work is trapped within a bottle of time and there is the meaning of why I will remember it long after I close this page.
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electric
a dangerous field of positive energy
tearing it open to find the good
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Ahhhh Thankyou everyone for your kind words.. what more can I say.. really do appreciate all of you dropping by..
coffee and dognuts are over in the corner
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Wow!!! This was completely amazing. I think the background enhances the poem. The words alone, however are so genius they don't even NEED a background. I'm blown away. I realy am. Keep it flowin'.
Nikki -
don\'t touch it~~~
An excellent poem here sis
Guess this was meant for me to read
Breaking though the negativity and look toward the positive
I gots up a few new ones come see me too
Hope you are doing ok
Luv ya Sis
Susan~~~~~ -
this hurt my brain.. and the background made it ok.. but then i read it again.. and it hurt.. i need a nurse bad.. SARS.. sorry SARS.. where'd that come from.. SARS.. WAR.. SARS.. WAR.. SARS.. meh.. i'm having a nap.. before one of those two finishes me off.. chaka boom baka..
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An excellent piece of self realisation, (something we all need to do from time to time).
I love the expressions you have used they really bring the poem to life.
Great piece Gill.
Andrew -
i loved the start and all the way down, amazingly penned
mari -
wwwhhhaaaaa-haaaa!!!!
i wanna jump in too! dang it!!
i hate it when i cant play with the rest of the kids at recess...
oh well, guess i'll just sit here all alone and clean the erasers.
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Thankyou everyone for all the wonderful comments.
/ff/
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Awesome Gill
Let all the former doubt and fear,
Fade at last and disappear,
Reach out your hoping, trembling hand,
Tear down the veil, and understand,
That you were made to live your dream,
You are much greater than you seem.
The measure of the song you sing,
Is born within the love you bring,
To live the dream you call your own,
You are not walking home alone. -
Beyond the shattered horizon
Walk across
If you dare
Love this. . .and
Yes, that's what it's all about
Happy you've found
the Positive route
Good stuff, Gill
~Mary O -
Excellent!
I saw this as having the courage to make your dream a reality. Very nicely done, Gill!
<3 Maureen x -
"ions collide" . . . i really liked this. (and the referance to atoms/subatomic particles and particle reactions)
i really enjoyed this piece.
cat -
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Jumping in with my eyes wide open, Gilly
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Lol@Zez!!!! Very uplifting write--so full of truth--just takes the willingness to risk, and then change takes place, and that often is such a beautiful thing. Listen to your heart, and you won't go wrong. I love this write! Very well done! Yeah!
Kelly
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I love this, Miss Gill Very soothing and inspirational
Hope you and Rick are feeling fine
Love ya,
Karen
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Nice Work
Very Nice.
I found it very positive and uplifting. It is truly an amazing feeling when all of the doubt is removed and the purpose of reality is now crystal clear. Negativity clouds the judgement but a clear mind can think clearly. -
Very inspirational piece, Not always easy to beak through the hold of sorrow, but sometimes it takes an effort that can be rewarding
THis touched me -
guilty
good job man i like it, it is sad, but what do i know. im told im depressed and im not so who knows. -
Great write with intense emotion and feeling!! The "tattered and torn" with the repetion of the "t" works sooo well - nice one
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Wild little thing, and the background is very pretty. Yeah, what is left after dreams blow up? Nice
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chillingly brutal. I thought this couldn't be a challenge to dream - maybe to dare face the nightmare boiling its turmoil under the surface?
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Gill, you are stronger than I am... I am afraid to walk across.
A very thought provoking write, my friend. Keep them coming.
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Joyce it'a not sad to me hun.. but if that's what you saw ..then OK..LOLOL and Mike yeah... all you have to do is wish.. dare and walk across the border.
And PG.... thanks girlbless you..Love,light and peace...
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I dare u , read this, if it doesn\'t pull u,
Awesome sure helped me, Gil. That's what I have to do is walk between the lines until, I find my way in the shattered pcs. of dream gone by. God bless, thanks you. This pc. just called prairie, prairie where r u? I found it right here. What I was seeking. Flows so well and is a must read write, gotta flag this to read again. 3:30 a.m., I hope I still making sense, not a total ass out of myself, because I can't sleep? -
I dared, she dared, and here we are, and it didnt hurt either.
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Ouch Gil are you okay? This really has a powerfully sad note.
Red
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