There was once a time,
a time I was almost beaten to death.
Not physical mind you,
but through my spirit.
The teasing of others
would never stop.
Their laughs of me
were the cruelest of torture.
I felt as if I was the worst mistake.
I thought death has a more peaceful end.
So in my room crying,
thinking what to do.
I saw a slim of light
shining in my heart.
I realize that there was
someone who knows I can be great.
I must try to show that world
that they might taunt me,
but I'm a princess in
mind, spirit, and heart.
With that great thought,
I knew I could just saved myself forever.
No one will every make me doubt
my soul ever again.
I will rise to Heavens with
great hope and light.
I said to myself right there and then
"My heart gave me wings
to fly to my dreams."
Author notes
This is based on a very hard time in my life and how I got out of it.
neoladyem
Written July 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- The People Will Decide by Lady Altheia.
300 points, ended July 11, 2006, 5 entries
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It could be a good poem, but I didn't at all feel your despair. A lot of us have gone through this before (and I certainly know where you're coming from), and while this does have the relation factor going for it, it's beyond bland. For a poem based on an experience like this, I'd expect to be shown despair, the rebirth of hope, and be able to feel your emotions.
Instead, you simply told your readers (with weak, ordinary words, no less) how you dealt with your life at this time, and that had absolutely no effect. Sorry, it was simply mediocre.
--Cristina -
This reminds me of me. I'm glad you can be so positive when life gets so difficult and unbearable! Lovely poem- thanks for entering it in the contest!
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Be blessed my Child!
God Is With you! -
wonderfly written
Wonderful poem!!!!!!!!!!! I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
This is incredible! I completely love it!!!! I think it is one of your best yet! It is so sad. My favorite lines were:
I said to myself right there and then
"My heart gave me wings
to fly to my dreams."
Great piece!!!!! Keep up the fabulous writing!!!
~Horsecowgirl~ -
Beautiful! This is very beautiful, I really love this poem. You wrote this so well. I hope you win the contest, good luck!
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Have you read my poem, 'Au Revoir'? allpoetry.com/Poem/1861739
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Thank you for sharing this poem! Teasing can be as tortuous as any physical torture! It scorches the soul with lashings of hatred. It makes profound welts that are hard to cure. I, too have had my share of tauntings. I liked the ending, particularly the part that says that says:
I will rise to Heavens with
great hope and light.
I said to myself right there and then
"My heart gave me wings
to fly to my dreams."
This gives the reader the impression of a phoenix rising above the ashes!
Great Job! -
this is really a heartfelt poem, written to make the feelings/emotions show..thank you for sharing, good luck..Linda
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Wonderful
Wonderful strength in this poem. What an uplifting piece to read. The resolve and strength of the speaker drives and carries this piece. I am so glad that you had that strong of a spirit - a rare gift. I love the ending - I said to myself right there and then "My heart gave me wings to fly to my dreams." Wonderful closing. Thank you for sharing this strength. I know this well help someone going through the same thing. Keep writing!
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I think it is wonderful. I also went through people bullying me from third grade through my freshman year in college. They eventually stopped. Not without my own spirit breaking. I am pleased to hear you moved on.
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