You lied to me once again which isn't nothing new
All the chances i have ever given you, you just blew
You said you only talked to her for a minute but you lied once again
I wish all your fucking lien will just come to an end
Why did you go four wheeler riding with her and not even tell me about it
I'm sick of all of this, I don't wanna deal with this shit
Why are you doing this to me, its like i don't mean anything to you
I give you chance after chance because i really do love you
But the more chances i give you, the more i end up being hurt
Ever since the lies i ask myself... are we really going to work
I try so hard not to bring that subject up, but i always do
Its so hard to picture my best friend 4-wheeler riding with you
And worst of all neither one of you decided to tell me
That's why I'm so pissed off, why cant you just see
You did the same thing when you went to that party, why didn't you learn
Why don't i ever lie to you, when the fuck is my turn
When is it my turn to do something without me telling you what i did
All the feelings you had for me.... you fucking hid
Why didn't you think of me? Why did you have to lie
Why is it every time we start going good, something makes me cry
Why cant you be true for once? And tell me *everything* you do
Why cant you think about me for once and not just you
Why would you go riding with my best friend and then lie about where you were
Why wasn't you with me? Why the fuck was you with her?
I know you guys are best friends and that's not the big deal
You both decided not to tell me, hurt is all i feel
Why didn't you guys tell me? What are you trying to hide
There has been so many days, i layed there and cried
But you wouldn't know because your always asleep
Why cant you stay up for once? Why cant you be mine to keep?
How can i feel so hurt but love you with every piece of my heart
Why do i still love you so much when you ripped my heart apart
So when is it my turn to do everything you done to me, i do to you
When is it my turn to lie and not ever tell you what i do
When is my turn to hurt you so bad you fucking cry yourself to sleep at night
When are we ever gonna stop all this, when are we ever gonna stop the fights?
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Written July 10th, 2006
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Just love it.
Love poems like these. I get to be in your shoes. Love the flow, the emotion everything. It's awesome work. Good luck.
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Hey honey, I love the write just like the other. I know your pain, especially crying yourself to sleep. Been there done that too many fucking times. You are giving, giving, givng...and your only getting shit-on back. Your too good for this. Hell, I wished my ex would have wanted to around as much as you are for him. Mind games get old quick. My ex promised she was coming back, we had talked about it for a week. Then, on the day she was suppose to come back, she called me (didn't have the nerve to tell me to my face) to say I'm sorry but I love R** and was not coming back. This is bullshit that nearly killed me. We were together for almost 9 years, and I would die for her...well I damn near did when I over-dosed. Hang in there, you have many friends and you can write me anytime you like. I know your pain.
David -
"I wish all your fucking lien will just come to an end"
"lien" See, "lien" is an actual word that means that someone has a right to ones property if they have justifiable means to do so. It's also pronounced similar to "lean".
So, perhaps you should change it to "lieng" or "lying" or "lien'" but even the last one probably wouldn't work.
"That's why I'm so pissed off, why cant you just see"
It's a good idea if you're going to use the apostrophe (which I would recommend) to do so in all your words and not just one or two.
Either or scenario.
"But you wouldn't know because your always asleep"
"your" would be "you're" but since you're sporadic on your usages of the apostrophe (again, either use them or don't) perhaps "youre" would be suitable.
"When is my turn to hurt you so bad you fucking cry yourself to"
In the beginning, I believe you're missing an "it" between the "is" and "my" words.
This is an emotional piece that seems bent on revenge. Revenge isn't love, it's hate.
It could use a good cleanup in the grammar and the usages of certain phrases. Of course, what piece doesn't?
A very angst-ridden piece, you have here.
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Cidnie... its so fucking hard to trust Jasona nd you dont know the half.. he has lied to me way to many times i have a reason not to trust him!! But you or anyone else never fucking understnad except 2 people.... i figured outta all of em at least u would... but you dont.. he has like 4 or 5 times about where he was at and what he was doing... how can i ever trust him again.. it has to build up by itself i cant just think ok im gonna trust u now.. NO it doesnt work that way! I trust nikki and everything... but y wouldnt seh tell me.. she didnt trust me enough to trust her that she would never do something to me like that! If she would of told me that they went four wheelr riding instead of you telling me everything would be great.... its the same thing as me hanging out with deric.. i couldnt of got pissed... well i could cuz he always does.. byt y would i.. i went thru the same thing.. i understand they r friends and nothing more! but the point is neither one of them told me... u know damn sure if i would of ever did that to nikki (with jeremy) she would be so fucking pissed off!!! she would prolly beat the fuck outta me! she wouldnt even let me drive jeremys truck let alone go 4 wheeler riding with him all by myself and holding on to his chest/stomach or whatever! she would be so fucking pissed off and you know that.. you looking from her point of the view your not even trying to understand where im coming from!!!!!!!!!
Shannon*Leah -
hey girlie, this is a good write i understand how you feel but if you dont trust jason then what makes you think you trust nikki? if you dont trust jason around her then you obvioulsy dont trust nikki, if anything was gonna happen it would've happend already...it takes two shannon...but iono i think the whole thing is stupid and it needs to be done with, i was with them when we we're all four wheeler riding and the only thing specific that actually happended was jason goin in the woods and trying to kill me!!!! *SCREAM* Ya it took me like ten or fifteen minutes to get the hell outta there...god ur boyfriends and ass....LOL but seriously i hope it works out and i thought you told me that you were done thinking about it? ya i know you thought you were but then you were sitten there bored and figgered hey why not write a poem about it...LOL well its a good write keep up the good work
Love ya girlie
Cidnie-ViLou90 -
okay there is a saying you should think about "what do you do when the only person that can make you STOP crying, is the same person that MADE you cry"? it seems you really love this guy, but all he does it hurt you. ive just gone through this with my bf, and we are working through it, he didnt do half the shit your guy is doing though, and if he had, i personally would have shown him the door.
you really need to think, is this pain all worth it, the love you feel from this person, should take away all the pain in your heart, is his love doing that????
you have a talent, i really look forward to reading work from you which does not display heartbreak and sadness. i hope this works out for you. just tell him, and HER, how you feel, and if they love you, they will understand your feelings.
good luck. and keep writting.
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