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it's raining on Monday

there's an open cabinet door
it seems to have been left a jar
and a quiet hum
that is heard closer, rather than a far
baskets that are half empty
and false trees that aren't quite real
looking out the window today
I still know that I can feel

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Written July 10th, 2006

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  • Shadow of a Crow
    May 20
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    A lot said in a short amount of words. Poetry at its finest. I love the dual irony in this line "and false trees that aren't quite real." I love how everything in this piece seems distant, yet there at your fingertips--and then the last line summarizes how you feel...making everything else make sense and fall into place. Good write.


  • Lucky5
    October 29, 2008
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    beautiful piece....Correct me if I'm wrong, but it seems to me kind of.....sad?

  • disparate
    July 12, 2006
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    Thanks for your comment and applause. It was something that I felt very strongly that day.. I'm glad it came off in the poem.


  • Dienush
    July 11, 2006
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    This poem is very interesting, I like the way you present details in such a way... The atmosphere really draws me in. It's short and sure says much.