Without words
how eloquently
you redefined
for me
what I held as true
Thought I saw clearly
but now I see
as though wearing
some old person's glasses
and the ground
is not quite under
my feet anymore
I seem to break
whatever I hold dear
I need repair so badly
not some eloquent
redefinition
consisting of no words
at all
Author notes
Why do I keep throwing all my care away? Must be a lesson here somewhere. But I am incredibly thick. x 'Silliwoman'
Written July 10th, 2006
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beautiful
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Thank you.
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This piece is an eloquent realization of the sort of thoughts we release with every sigh. I feel your sense of self-doubt and loss as to how to take the world. You certainly gave the prompt richness and depth.
You and I were cut from the same cloth, my friend. Thank you for giving voice to my heart as well as your own.
Love,
Camille
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Thank you so much my dear. Yes, I think we may be cut from the same cloth. That's a very good thing in my opinion!
xx Debs
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Deb
another deep and reflective piece of poetry. we long for acceptance & just being loved for who we are yet seek makeovers for self esteem I think. excellent write.
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Thanks Bob.... It was about being strategically ignored. Now and again I am brought out of the drawer and polished by the subject of this poem.... and then I completely go to hell in a hand cart as my granny used to say...!
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Good good.
You should read your own crystal clear words. You are you. You define yourself, whatever the eloquence and sophistry of others. You write so well you must understand.
XG
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oh, just oh, why did i ever?
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great poem on that prompt!
the wearing away of what it is frustrating..enough..that
it becomes a scratchy wool sweater eager to be replaced
and by the sounds of it...just in time too!
ears/Seattle sis
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'yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let it be heard
some do it with a bitter look
some with a flattering word
the coward does it with a kiss
the brave man with a sword!'
Oscar Wilde
a woman with too care ...
never regret caring xxxxxxxxxxx beautiful melancholy baby x
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reviewing !!
the coward did it with a kiss. How long ago was that? still struggling. Its coz I never was that much understood before. I like men but now I know that they can't be my friends even if thats what I am used to and what I want and need. Men have partners and they hate women who are wanting their men in a wholly intellectual way. You see, you cant have a proper conversation with a woman. Men don't seem to need the flattery. Which is such a rest. You can short circuit all the girl stuff and just get onto the real thing. And get straight to what matters to both. THEN you can say to a bloke - and how do you feel? and after he's said everything in between he will tell you how he feels. THEN he feels better. BUT he feels guilty cos he told you and not her. THEN she finds out he told you and not her and then everything that would have been fine and helpful turns into hell in a handcart. Then the years go by and you find me saying 'hello darling' to you. x -
ah karen - he suddenly
came back and I was so sad and he held me. How harsh is that? Just when I was away and clear from all the pain. Guess what's back in my stocking...................... xx have a mellow and peaceful christmas. xx love, debs xx
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I keep seeing your face pop up in the comments of poems I read and I thought it was about time I came on over an gave you a visit and Oh boy Im really glad I did. You are a beautiful writer, so sensitive and clear. your poems just flow like a river. I will deffinately be back to read some more. Is it ok if I add you to my favs.... well Im going to anyway. lol
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So kind of you to comment on my poem. Especially as I contacted you accidentally and out of the blue!! Promise I will return compliment right now.. xx chilli
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Beautiful
HI there, this is a really lovely poem, got a nice contemporary feel to it, a wonderful work of art, keep up the good work, have a great time. -
Mike - I will try my best to fail better next time! Love your 'motto' x debs
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Took me back to a place I never wanted to revisit, but you did it so well and with such economy of angst. Excellent.
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oh mike
where have you gone? It was lovely talking to you. x be at peace xx
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Thanks Vic. Of course, I imagine you may know the context.... x debs
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Pain is probably never worth the poetry for the poet. But the rest of us certainly benefit. Nice twist as you revisit the opeing theme. vic
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chilli, found your work at last. I love this one, though it is hard to really read/understand.
I like short poems with short lines. I think that is the skill/trick to getting real thoughts across to other people, not just sound-bites. You can do it too, love this place. Colinxxx -
Very clever, loved the ending....
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Guess you're right Jeff. Just chucked a bit too much in one direction..........
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Good poem, can't believe that you are throwing ALL your care away... Best wishes Jeff
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